As yawning night extends its jaw
and exhales a tuneful sigh,
music rises like a blanket
being drawn across the sky.
Like the movement of the ocean
fingers dance across the keys,
I am fluid in its contour
silent spirit of the seas.
Leaving trails of ghostly echoes
an harmonious swell of sound,
bleeds and sweeps in clouds of humming
till the melody’s unwound.
Waltzing through the placid waters
soul awash in love’s embrace,
as an arch starts in my body
and ends somewhere out in space.
I slip slowly into silence
to meander through the deep
hypnotic waves of motion
that flow gently ‘neath my feet.
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt Contest.. Big Points !!! by Sweet Impatience.
1600 points, ended September 14, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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this is a very beautiful poem that you've written. the imagery that is through out this piece is simply brilliant.
excellent job with the prompt & with your poem
good luck in the contest
kat
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beautiful is the only word i can think to say about this poem..wait there is one more majestic, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Lovely Poem
There is so much I enjoyed about this poem. The rhyme and the flow were wonderful and the imagery was stuning. A pleasure to read. Best of luck.
Bless You,
Sandy
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Superb!!!!!
Oh! BRAVO!!!!! DelightfuL! Exquisite! Charming!This is the best poem I have read in a while!!!!Marvelously detailed in description! The flow is perfectly done! This needs to be published right away! Masterful execution! Thunderous applause and standing ovation from me! A real masterpiece my dear! Thanks for writing and sharing this poem! Made my whole day!
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I loved this. It has rhythm and beauty.
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Good poem!
Very good use of the ocean, waves and water as metaphors in this poem! I like the romantic, understeatd nature of this poem! It's got a perfect title and last three lines. Good flow / rhythm and good wording! I like this one -- good luck in the contest!
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Breathtaking in its content and elegance. Powerful stanzas kick started my imagination which had pretty much been asleep all day.
"as an arch starts in my body
and ends somewhere out in space."
I love these lines , so creative as are all the lines in this very well written poem but these lines are my favourite
Best of luck in the contest my friend
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Very good. It has a nice rhythm to it, as if it just needs music to bring it all to life. Very impressive. Cheers.. Tws..
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Awesome!
A rushing mighty spectacle of nature's
power and beauty. The images you painted
were outstanding. I could feel the raging
of the waters with galing winds and tempest.
Excellent!
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