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Marked

 

 

 

~it was after supper
Master came to take his eyes

earlier in the day
  those eyes betrayed his weakness
  the weakest hand left the hoe
  to shade the weaker eyes
as across the furrows they crawled
undulating like a black snake

on the shimmer of heat rising

framed within an open window
her glistening white breasts
fanned by the flat face of Jesus
from the first baptist church


that’s where they laid him
there among the unmarked
where the grass grows high

scratched upon the stone

      ~Henry~

  that, in itself, made him special




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Prompt~
You are in a cemetery. You come across a simple but very old gravestone with only the name,
Henry. No date, no other words.

My title "marked" could be in reference to a scar that's carried for life. Sometimes people are born with marks, or they are inflicted by others.

It was the one name "Henry" that brought these words of the poem. In the old south, many black people only had the one name and many probably never knew their family names as they were brought here in slavery as children. Reading stories of how a man of color could not lift his eyes in the presence of the white ladies and also remembering a novel by the title of Mandingo, written in 1957 by Kyle Onstott, set in the antebellum south brought back the stories of hangings and murder. In many old documents and wills, where the human slaves were left to others as property, they are listed as having just the one name. One of those names could have been "Henry"

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  • individuality gold member
    March 29

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    a good start, i like ambiguity of those first two lines, it gives the poem an edge of darkness though there is a calm voice, no rush.

    there is a sense of fear i think here, in the weakness, maybe someone old, gardening, the hoe, a sigh that twists across the face, resignation pops into my mind. ah, a religious theme unfolds, heaving bosom and lord’s smile.

    and now it is all a memory, for that resignation came to pass, time took the soul from the fields and left a reminder of his presence.

    a good poem, taking the reader down the halls of history.


    • malmadre gold member
      March 29
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      Your comments take me back to these long forgotten things that I have written and then I come to take another look. One of my first attempts at free verse. Thank you for coming by, your opinions mean much.


  • Victory Gin silver member
    October 31, 2008

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    I have been stumbling into poems about unmarked graves lately. Strange. Maybe it is a sign that I should begin writing my own epitaph. It is Halloween after all.


  • IronMaiden1236
    September 13, 2008
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    Congrats!!!


  • Dalaney gold member
    September 13, 2008
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  • paulcreates silver member
    September 12, 2008

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    "..framed within an open window
    her glistening white breasts
    fanned by the flat face of Jesus
    from the first baptist church.."

    This brings back memories to me of revival services as a preacher's kid. Every possible opening in the facility would be open in hot weather, the women inside fanning themselves with the church bulletin...
    Very expressive here Pat.

    Paul

    • malmadre gold member
      September 12, 2008
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      Thanks for reading Paul, I experiment with free verse now and then, who would ever believe that it's hard to not rhyme. We always had those church fans on a stick, like a flat popsicle.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    September 5, 2008

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    I remember that book. It was banned in some parts of the south- I think. This poem has captured that time.

    A great read.
    Joe


  • sticksnstones
    September 4, 2008
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    wow

    i love how you write! with such passion you my friend are a born story teller

  • Cinnarry gold member
    September 3, 2008
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    sigh...lovely


  • Sunshine Always
    August 31, 2008

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    A look back through time Malmadre. One can barely begin to imagine the depths of cost, humiliation,and suffering that existed then and now in many places.A strong piece bringing the reader right into the heart of it all.Very well written my friend...mal


  • Pure Thought silver member
    August 30, 2008
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    Quietly and strongly written. Well done.


  • IronMaiden1236
    August 30, 2008
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    WOW!

    Reaally Gooood, man..beautiful flow


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    August 30, 2008

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    OH I do like this very much. Imagination, mystery, depth. Excellent work to this prompt. ~Pamela

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