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Scared in Scotland

“Twas quite late one night, on my vacation,
we had been drinking, in a Scottish bar.
We left together, in admiration,
we were hand in hand, off to a boudoir.
She could feel the heat of my affection,
we were both so drunk that we left the car.
I convinced her that Lane was not so great,
so we left for her home, it was quite late.

The shortcut we took was through the graveyard,
‘twas creepy and dark with mist all around.
I squeezed Marie’s hand, we were on our guard.
Then deep in the mist we heard a strange sound,
tapping in rhythm on something quite hard.
We were scared a ghost would rise from the ground.
My arm slipped around her and squeezed her tight,
she said; “don’t worry, it will be alright”.

Deep in the graveyard the night was so black,
we trembled together as we inched along.
We traveled so far, we could not turn back.
I tried to run but her hand held my thong.
The sound was so close, about to attack;
we then saw a man with chisel in hand,
he turned and remarked so we’d understand.

“My name is Henry, it’s spelled with a “Y”,
some fool couldn’t spell engraving an “I”.

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt:
You are in a cemetery.  You come across a simple but very old gravestone with only the name, Henry. No date, no other words.

This is a work of fiction, and similarities to names or persons living or dead are purely coincidental.

 

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  • Cinnarry gold member
    September 3, 2008
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    Brava Amera


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 1, 2008

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    What a fab prompt that is.. and what a fab poem you've penned for it

    You are a true storyteller hun!! That was a fabulous fun read!


  • Dalaney gold member
    August 31, 2008

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    lol... you little devil


  • k.a.s.s.i.e
    August 31, 2008

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    kewl! the prompt was really cool, and how the intense creepiness turned to humor was pretty great too!!!

    ~kassie


  • malmadre gold member
    August 31, 2008

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    Oh, I love the ending, I too, thought of doing something with the name of Henri, perhaps a clothing designer who faked his death and moved to Paris. This is great!


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    August 30, 2008
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    Too funny--well done!


  • sailor ptolema
    August 30, 2008

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    ! This is soo great Amera . What a wonderful adventure you take the reader on . LOVED it .

    Meg

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  • Pure Thought silver member
    August 30, 2008
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    LOL

    Wonderfully constructed, thongs and all. Great humorous write.


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    August 30, 2008

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    LMAO

    Wonderful Ottava Rima
    Splendid humor pours from what many would take as a dark prompt
    "We traveled so far, we could not turn back.
    I tried to run but her hand held my thong."



    Simply stated, I Love It
    Wish you the best in the contest
    Take care

    David


  • paulcreates silver member
    August 30, 2008
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    HAHAHAHAHA!
    You NUT!

    Paul


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    August 30, 2008

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    LOL!!! Again, your humor shines through brilliantly - even with a dark theme as a prompt.

    Awesome write!!!!


  • IronMaiden1236
    August 30, 2008
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    OMG!! LMAO!!

    brb...have to go to the loo!!!!!!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 30, 2008

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    When whimsey meets gothic in the midst of a tale redolent of naughtiness.
    You are a master of absurdity, the mistress of nonsesne, and a rhymer par excellence.
    And this poem is definitely, Not Bad


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    August 30, 2008

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    NOW JUST A COTTON-PICKIN' MINUTE!

    ... hand held your thong, indeed... mutter, mutter, mutter...

    Yeah, they're circumstantial all right. You meant coincidental, but they're circumstantial all right!


    Great fun - loads of bunnies!


  • PerVirtuous
    August 30, 2008

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    You must've been tipping the single malts that night! What a whale of a tale! Ha ha ha. Poor Lane will have to spend the night all alone, you hussy! Ha ha ha.

    This is a delightfully whimsical poem constructed masterfully in the perfect form for such a tale. I love the personal touches, yet this would stand well for those unfamiliar with the love triangle developing. I give it three Bi-bunnies.

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