Don't buy me dozens of roses
They honestly make me gag!
I'd much rather have a card made from
an old brown paper bag!
Give me a smiley face sticker
A dollop of ice cream a-swirl
But don't give me dozens of roses
If you do I know I will hurl!
Some colorful salt-water taffy
pictures of ones I hold dear
Would be better than all of the roses
That people would give me all year!
So don't buy me anymore roses
Just maybe instead give me cash
If you give me any more roses
They're gonna end up in the trash!
How does this poem make you feel? What was your general impression?
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This poem makes me giggle
It reminds me a lot of my mom, who hates cut flowers. But I'm curious, why do you hate roses? The poem is nice--it has a good flow and a good feeling, but I think I'd like it a little more if you told the reader WHY you hate roses so much. Is it just the smell, or what they represent? Did you have a bad experience with roses when you were younger? Was there some sort of rose monster that attacked you?! I'm joking now, of course, but I just want to know!
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Sorry!
I can't even believe that I missed your comment! So very sorry! In answer to your question...everyone in my family seems to think that roses are cure-alls for behavior! The majority of men are the same! Roses do absolutely nothing for me anymore. The symbolism that they should carry is all worn out I'm afraid! Dorky flower in my estimation with no character whatsoever! What's wrong with a daffodil or a moon pie?! Well you asked and thanks for asking! Best regards
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Full of Contrasts
Editorial note. Salt-water taffy not saly
The simplistic rhyme scheme and the beat of the poem are almost sing-song and over bearing and normally would detract from my reading. In this case, I found the nursery rhyme quality made the poem more sardonic and delightful. Was suprised and delighted by how I was turned around by the end of the poem.
The childish responses to roses soon became a deeper demand for honesty, intimacy, simplicity and the abiltiy to respond to the serendipity of the moment not with a romantic over wrought game plan. The roses became symbols of being used for false purposes. Denied being appreciated for what they are by their misuse. I love the layers of thought, meaning that I find in this poem that also support and do not betray the playfulness that is in the overt view of this piece. Quite wonderful.
Love,
Tom B.
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Thank you Tom!
Finally!!!!!Someone finally realized the symbolism in this poem!I thought if I put these thoughts into a simplistic form more people would have caught the undertones Thank you for your insightful and thoughtful comments! Also for the spelling error! Best regards -
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Critical reviewing and just having an intelligent response to a poem can often take a great deal of effort. I know. When I was initially getting over my eye operation and the time leading up to it when I was on drugs, I could only do two or three before I pooped out. Most people here applaud your efforts, but not many will dare to look inside the piece. It means not only becoming intimate with you but looking closely at themselves as well. Still, I love those times when I get a review that demonstrates that a person looked closely and thought about my poem. So, you are more than welcome. I always tell people that my reviews and responses are a direct reflection of how much their work touched me.
Love,
Tom B.
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