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Simple After All

 

 

Summon up the long lost legions
it is the latter days and nights
pitched deep, starless as Hade's nether crack
a sweat of desperation in air gone sour
hard to breathe
Dante's bark is ditched on a mud-bank
his footsteps fill with pond slime
iridescent as the scaly hides of fish

The river's still, thick as pudding
we wait and fill our time with chants
text messages sent by urban tribesmen
from  a time that land forgot.
Look out the window of the 4th street bus
see your sad reflection. The scar that never
went away scores your cheek
a Prussian foil's cut, but was in fact
a cat that you surprised, tried to gather up
when you were five. Mary do you see
the light at the end of the tunnel? Has your
fine body coarsened over all these years.
What are you holding in your lap that
means so much. Can you make the change?
Your stop is just ahead, tokens not accepted
Via Dolorosa, Jesus' halting footsteps
through narrow streets, hauling that load
on bony shoulders. Tears spurt like geysers
from the open windows of double wides
country songs your mother sang
recall memories of great celebrity
Listen, is all they can do, the welfare moms,
the arthritic pensioners, the food stamp kids
Crucifixion is no small thing. But is it Death
or Resurrection that you fear?
Children, mindless, grinning brats,
throw angled rocks and twisting cats
browbeaten by their football dads
desperate for love of any kind
If only Papa could have played

bonus babies signed for megabucks
a night on Letterman, a fleet of Mercedes

more pussy than they ever dreamed!
But the coaches never understood
never saw fame in their fat beer bellies
They take it out on whining wives
send the kids to concentration camps.
The  procession crawls by old screen doors
past faded flamingos on the lawns
up the hill past the brewery
where other crosses tilt and sway

occupied by petty crooks and false Evangelists
leaning in the Jerusalem wind
It will all come right. The sun will shine
The clouds will have their silver linings
a pound of flesh the contract signed

Don't look a gift horse in the mouth
Eat drink and do Mary
So simple
after all

 

 

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  • Mairi bheag gold member
    September 16, 2008

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    There is a lot to this and a lot in it, but at the end I am left feeling that I read something terse and economic and focussed. Artistry!

    [Enlighten me - did you mean "Dolorosa" or were you playing with words, and wanting me to pick up "way of the rose"?]


  • cvillelisa
    September 8, 2008
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    hey you. could you send this to BurstNow@gmail.com inside the body of an email ???

    thanks.

    also, a short bio.
    thanks.
    xo


  • myrataal silver member
    September 2, 2008
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    This poem rattled me ...

    layer upon layer, descriptive of what the world has become, and God only wants us to remember Eternity ...

    Angsty, indeed. The transition will be much smoother, do not fear.

    David ... A painterpoetprophetphilospher should expect to be overwhelmed at times.

    Peace to you on this day, September 3, in the year of the Lord 2008.

    Myra


  • Zayra Yves
    September 1, 2008
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    Wow! This is cool. I really appreciate this poem's complexity!


  • malmadre gold member
    August 31, 2008

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    I came by earlier but was pretty much speechless, it took a while to fathom this, evidently you couldn't hold this in any longer. When it becomes a movie, most likely directed by Quentin Tarentino, in which he will play a part, it could become the cult film of the decade. I usually stay away from those cult things, but just know that I am a member of your cult. Simply after all, simply amazing!


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    August 31, 2008
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    I rarely comment on the comments to my work but I want to thank all of you for these wonderful words (still deciphering Lute's)of support. This is not the best of times right now and I needed this to get me off my ass, and outside my sorry head.

    Thanks,Lisa,Lane and Lute

    how about that..three L's.

    my new favorite letter!


  • Lute
    August 31, 2008

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    U explode?

    head come flying off and goes off rolling around?

    It would appear U poemed instead of being medi-vacced in the shiny helicopter from your consternation.

    Not my fault acourse, Ya know, a point of information, of no likely value when ya get old, the poo gets all chiffon like, a mousse thingy, not that I know anything at all about such things, like cavier seems kinda fishy to me.

    One of the points of being is seeing I believe.
    I am a simple soul as U know.

    Rock & Roll. Much on my mind lately being the ruminatin sort. Old men is much given to rememeberin which is a damn shame since the world is happnin all the time--yeh well for a while yet.

    Preacher says, vanity of vanities, well depending on your translation acourse, not much point getting into emptiness.---

    still,

    you gotta be quick to dodge bullets, well till ya ain't quick no more.

    Well I am off to read to about pufferfish, pufferfish seems important to me. Pufferfish I've learned go in holes and crevices and puff up and no amount of tuggin and pullin can get them out.

    Sometimes everything leads up to a poem that seems to say everything One has ever wanted to say, after that you hafta start all over again, somewhere down between the borders where you can be patient and explain--

    Damn shame no-one has time to lissen anymore, which puts me in mind of them pufferfish being busy staying out of the danger.

    I imagine them pufferfish have a lotta gas. There's a little one lives in the Amazon, I'm thinking if I lived in the Amazon it would be good to be a pufferfish.

    so Like I said, start over, must be a few little things wrong with the world.

  • cvillelisa
    August 30, 2008
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    I'd like to put this in the Fall Edition of burst!

    If that meets your approval (and I'll do a crit but I need to paste it into a white page the pebbly background makes it a bit difficult for me to read but not enough that I dont know a good poem when I read one) send it to BurstNow@gmail.com

    a brief bio as well.

    Could be my mood -- but it made me weep.

    Good work D.

    Lisa

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