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Water Demon

silvery figure
sprung from cobalt ocean's spray
sea apparition.

Author notes

The prompt was the third definition of Kappa, a water demon. I was never very good at haikus, but oh well.

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  • Kappa Pyua
    September 22, 2008

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    This is the best water demon poem I have read. Just a few corrections in order. No caps are neccesssary in a haiku and no periods at the end. Fix that and you have a perfect pivoting haiku, so that it can be read from both directions. congrats.


  • Confusedboy
    August 31, 2008
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    delightful read, and enlightening.