exhaling in and then struck
this must be bad, with my luck
laying there contained by this body
my soul trying to embody
finally struck with the end
and me with no soul to defend
but as i see it i am finally being lifted
and it seems my luck has been shifted
crated into your arms
and finally seeing your charms
i gave in and let my self be freed
cause all along this was my real need
Author notes
i saw it as a freedom, of love of pain, of the real thing that needed to be seen
A contest entry
- When Soul Meets Body - Picture Prompt by Kazytc.
1300 points, ended August 31, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I really like this--it flows well and is just great!
good luc -
Wow what fun!
Love this chirpy poem with a serious edge and fun undertones, humour is my thing and I love bright breezy poems, life is too short to be too serious!
Love this bit:
'exhaling in and then struck
this must be bad, with my luck
laying there contained by this body
my soul trying to embody'
'this must be bad, with my luck'
Sounds like me... 'with my luck'! Love this!
Great graphics and chirpy flow, and well rhymed too! Best of luck in my contest and thanks millions for entering! Have fun!
Poetic Hugs & Thanks
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
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