Across the street from a gas station
lies a homeless man
huddled up in a corner
trying to find warmth
it's 5am-
the cold part is over
but it is still below freezing
his wet clothes on his back
is all he has
his stomach aches in hunger
this is the second or maybe third day?
he can never tell
he bows his head in shame
as people stare
look at him
and wonder
why is he homeless
drugs
drinks
they want to help
that is what he knows
but he never knows why they
don't
his pain is to much
he's to cold
he closes his weary eyes
and
ends
the pain
A contest entry
- -Bohemian Rhapsody- by sailor ptolema.
1100 points, ended October 9, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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i think the repetition of capitalized words doesn't do much to enhance the meaning, or impact. it'd be fine without them
. but yes, they do appear to be in a lot of pain..
thanks for entering.
pt
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I think this is really good..liked the lines.."that is what he knows but he never knows why they DON'T", you portray the sadness, and helplessness well.
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so, i think the prompt is 'homeless people'. But I requested that you put the prompt in your AN. Please do asap. Will be back later to comment.
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Authors notes: this poem is about homeless people
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