Primal instincts allure
me to destinies call,
as my spirit wanders in
the enchantment of twilight,
searching for peace.
My nature rises within
obscurities gate,
yearning revival of an
ancient soul.
Mysterious echoes whisper
in darkness,
summoning me to dimensions
alternate from my casual
universe.
A full moon cast incantations
of intoxication inside my flesh.
Releasing my inner being
in rapturous flight.
On wings of an eagle I
escape mortality and intermingle
with animalistic appetites.
The blood of wild creatures
stir my beastial cravings,
evoking salacious needs that
can only be met within
the raging fires of the jungle.
Author notes
The prompt or theme for this piece was Animal.
Inside every human being lay dormant a spirit
which when awakened has the posibility to
arouse carnality not unlike a beast.
I used the acronym ( A.P.E.) which spells Ape to form
the title of my poem,"Awakened Primative Essence"
I believe it adds an exotic flavor to the piece.
Would love to get some constructive feedback.
Hope you enjoy(ed) it.
A contest entry
- Animal by Thoughts-of-Soloman.
1800 points, ended September 23, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I find this reflected:
A man who is separated in ignorance from his creaturely and earthy roots, I believe, is indeed incomplete. How could any influence more divine, exercise any effective and recognised Lordship over a servant who neither knows or is aware of their condition.
I'm unsure whether you would have put it that way but that's what I take from your write.
For me though, I would have thought it's 'mortality' which includes the 'bestial cravings' to take flight from and not to! So that a more spiritually complete and peaceful freedom, free from its chains, can be found.
I much like the way you've written this, with a down to earth passion which seems to seek some kind of inner completion. I'm unsure about the direction it takes though, for the reasons I've pointed at.
It would be clearer to me to say:
That the animal finds pleasure in 'Animal'
and the spirit finds its pleasure in Spirit
and each accords to its own, on its own level.
Only when all is in its appointed place of 'higher' and lower' can a man be complete with the flow of interconnectedness running through him as singularly clear and un-fragmented.
Thanks for the opportunity to comment on your interesting and well written piece.
All the best
Sol
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Thank you for your thoughtful entry, I will comment later.
Sol -
Wow, very nice! I like the imagery and how you describe the emotions. Great job!
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Damn!
Wow kid you got a blazing one here! l.o.l. u might get the women pulling out thneir hair..or something! l.o.l.
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