Love does not reside in thy heart
Long ago it decided to depart
It was only a black art
Love does not reside in thy heart
Thou was wonderful at the start
A beautiful piece of fine art
Love does not reside in thy heart
Long ago it decided to depart
Author notes
Triolet
A contest entry
- Short Lived Short Form #36 by Samplette.
1500 points, ended September 5, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - favourite prewrites, please; by epitome.
500 points, ended August 14, 82 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Good Luck!
It's a refreshing piece because of it's length, it's so much harder to write in a short line number, and I appreciate how well you've managed. I would have liked two different rhyme sounds, as though in contrast, like your ideas, I found the rhyme didn't work as well as it could of in such a lovely poem.
Good luck! -
Indeed a lovely piece of poetry. Flows very nicely and has depth of meaning and longing... Best wishes to you. I enjoyed the read!
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A lovely piece of poetry. I am not used to the whole thing rhyming. I know the rhyme scheme should be: ABaAabAB. Still, a very nice write. Thank you for entering.
Sam
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