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Someone You Knew

Young Patrick was charming
A hot Go-Go dancer
Down at the weekend saloon

He came in with the tide
But the priests 'shore' don't mind
a blast from hung Patrick's typhoon

So it goes
with the night
But comes back
still
brand new
As the sun
dips from sight
while you pine for
that someone you knew

Soon Patrick moved moved up
To west side Man-trampin'
A full 360 rear view

A specialty item
A kept and combed stallion
A bigger cage at the zoo

So it goes
with the night
But comes back
right
on cue
As the sun
dips from sight
while you pine for
that someone you knew

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  • Naughtygrlred
    September 1, 2008

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    i knew a patrick once, he was young dumb and full of nothingness, he went away to war when he came back he moved to texas...that is where he became a gigalo...gosh he reminded me of someone i use to know...oh well

  • luvdrkchocolate
    August 29, 2008

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    So you writing more lyrics now? Are you going to be making a song out of it or is it you just getting some thoughts off your chest?


    • horus8 gold member
      August 29, 2008
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      It's already a song.

      • luvdrkchocolate
        August 29, 2008
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        Oh! I didn't know that. Is that on that one website of yours? How long ago did you write it?