He enters the room
So hot, so hot
Your sexy
As I sit up a little straighter, can't help to wonder
Does he notice me?
The start of class, he takes a seat
I'm taking notes but I can't think
Of anything else but to get him
to look at me
Stand up, I stand up
to throw trash away
as I sneak a peek, try not to freak
as he looks my way
Our eyes connect and I see sparks
Tunnel vision, all else is dark
took a step, begin to fall
Hit the ground, got up and found
That he's laughing at me
Be careful what you wish for
He noticed me all right
So hot, he's so hot
I bet he thought I was a sight
After class, he starts to pass
as I look up sheepishly
But he doesn't laugh, or give me crap
but gives me a little wink
Our eyes connect and I see sparks
Tunnel vision, all else is dark
took a step, begin to fall
Hit the ground, got up and found
That he's laughing at me
The rest of the day, he disappeared without a trace
Maybe I'm just not his taste
Too bad, I'm not sad. Ok maybe just a little bit
He had probably forgotten that i exist
After school, still thinking about him, Oh I'm a fool
My shoulder's tapped, I turn and choke
When I realize its him, and as he spoke
My heart was loud as thunder
He was asking me for my number
Our eyes connect and I see sparks
Tunnel vision, all else is dark
took a step, begin to fall
Hit the ground, got up and found
That he's laughing at me
Author notes
I wrote this just for fun and thought it a perfect way to start my school year! With a little school crush poem (=
Hope this made you smile and its not completely stupid, lol
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Lol, I can kinda relate to this which is awesome! Lol. Anyway, really nicely done. Hope to see you soon.
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Well...if I can remember back to the dark ages of when I was in school...LOL...I can begin to relate to this write!
Stand up, I stand up
to throw trash away
as I sneak a peek, try not to freak
as he looks my way
I see this old ploy is still in use today! This was a very enjoyable read Hun...have a safe and fantastic year!
Az
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wow I loved this
what a great way to start school 
I love the easy laidback rhyme, the flow was great and by the middle I was already laughing! Seemed to me like a great song!! 
loved it. it's perfect
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Not stupid at all!! Life would stink if we couldn’t write fun stuff too. In fact the only corrective type comment I have is I don’t think think you meant to write “think think” in line 7 lol. The best part though is how you kept repeating the falling part. It made it seem at the end like maybe it could be kind of symbolic as in falling for him. All in all a very nice fun upbeat piece that is written in a vague enough way that you can play with the meaning a bit, & I’m sure all can relate!!
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this is pretty good i like the feel of it. and it exactly like you wish your first day of school could go haha btw you misspelled load it's loud
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