loose on the ocean
wave washed, storm ravaged vessel-
you anchor my life.
Author notes
purity is the prompt( it could also be the sea spirit) new to this style(ish)i think i like it but may be too rigid for me.
A contest entry
- Haiku-me by Kappa Pyua.
2100 points, ended September 22, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is interesting, the concept you took on the word Purity. It can definately be an anchor in life. I'm not an expert on haiku yet, but the middle line was a little long. thx for entering though the words are true.
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Very Interesting !
I love how you summed all of these wonderful word's as well as expressed them in so few of word's ! You anchor my life. Powerful word's here !!!!!!! Keep up the wonderful writes as well as the flow of them....Good luck in the contest! Brenda Gae
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i thankyou and i am pleased it touched you, what more can i ask
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This is a fairly good haiku. I like it. but, the comma's are not needed. at the end of second line just put a dash for the pause. Also you need to include in AN. Which prompt you used or this lovely piece will be DQ'
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i thankyou for your tips and have cleaned it up
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Wonderful work!
I am amazed by the versatile pen of doodlebug!
You are a great poet. You should do well with this form. It is concise and powerful. Not at all too rigid.
Good luck in this contest.
Myra
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once again i thank you for kind words and encouragement
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