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Dance



I
saw
you
naked
dancing
lonely
on the bank of a river
in the darkest
corner of
my heart
where
my
love
is
ruined.

A contest entry

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  • FransB gold member
    August 29, 2008
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    Thank you

    for the entry. I will comment in greater detail later. Be blessed. Frans

    Ps
    Back again. At first I thought that this poem does not 'belong' to this contest, but then reading it again and again, I decided to leave it. Who am I do DQ or to try and read the mind of another! Besides these comments, I enjoyed the manner in which you write [have also read other poems of yours, although I cannot put a name to this entry] - I can feel the pain, and I notcied its depth. This is what one of my stanzas was about, and you so magnificently portrayed this [whether in poetic sense or as truth from the heart]. Once again, your entry is much appreciated. Frans