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Clutter

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Dance this mess around
                              Turn the corner fast
          Show up twenty minutes late
                                              It’s never going to last
Get a pretzel twist
    Grow two inches tall
                              Plant a garden in the spring
                  Dress up for the ball
Wear the color green
                          Kick with your left foot
          The bread is on the bottom shelf
                                              Your cats covered in soot
Our thoughts they clutter up our minds
    They’re random at very best
                            If we could only sort them out
              We’d be doing better than the rest
                                            The rest will grow up weak
    We’ll do the best we can
                                      But for now the clutters Back
                    I’m normal once again         

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  • skitza
    September 11, 2008

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    I liked it. I would complain about the lack of fullstops but I think that was intentional.
    I thought it was quite funny in a weird sort of way. Very unusal though from beginning to end.
    'Dance this mess around
    Turn the corner fast
    Show up twenty minutes late'

    Thanks for entering.
    skitza


  • G-y-p-o
    September 11, 2008

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    I like the randomness of the layout and how you presented your poem. Good job!

    'Get a pretzel twist
    Grow two inches tall
    Plant a garden in the spring
    Dress up for the ball
    Wear the color green
    Kick with your left foot
    The bread is on the bottom shelf
    Your cats covered in soot
    Our thoughts they clutter up our minds
    They’re random at very best
    If we could only sort them out
    We’d be doing better than the rest
    The rest will grow up weak
    We’ll do the best we can
    But for now the clutters Back
    I’m normal once again




  • No longer in use
    September 2, 2008

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    Very random poem. Very, very random poem. Wonderful.

    Good jorb. I like it well. And well...I like it.

    Keep it up and be random. Yay!!!


  • Andiness
    August 29, 2008

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    I like the rhyming, but I'm a little confused. I have a feeling that was the idea though. You pull off random idea poems better then I do..no fair!

    ps im on deviantart...oscuridad13