Empitiness
Feeling whole.
Polar opposites.
Loneliness
is that the word?
Not needing another relationship
but relationships in more.
Friendship?
The special ones, the real.
The compassion and the care.
not the fun.
Tears, Fear.
One night stand may help
but only for a night.
Unless something becomes of it
how complicated.
Life.
Author notes
I hate that I write basically only lonely poems...unless they are completely fiction, but right now I'm feeling extremely lonely and I wanted to write something that had more.
Do read...Tell me whatcha think.
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That's what writing is here for right? This is one of those poems I bet everyone can relate to at one point or another. I really get the feeling your trying to portray here. And you know what...I bet it has to do with the way you placed your words and sentence structure. Very Nice.
Suggestion: As far as the effectiveness of the title, first line and last line, I actually do not really see any connections there. I suppose you can connect More to the Emptiness line as in, I see where your going here, but other than that, no particular effect there. -
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Actually...I had NO idea what to call this, I just knew that I didn't want it to be Emptiness. So I wrote More. Thanks for the comment and the like :-).
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