I sit at the table of tragedy, lost
among those who so often fail in life;
who give it there all, at whatever the cost
who bypass the pleasant, thrust and parry with strife;
and with you I share here what I’ve learned my last mile-
that for every one tear, there is in you a smile.
That the two never mix, I cannot agree
I’ve seen them- while losing or when so much is won;
in all their great glory and mixed tragedy
strolling hand in hand, wed, as if one;
like peaked soaring mountain over dark valley floor-
without the other, one is no more.
That being said, I find unrestrained passion
binding those who’ve experienced the same bitter pill;
alleviating sorrow, spicing compassion
reinvigorating purpose where lost is the will;
and every day new when it comes ‘round again
I'll see light in the darkness if I've had just one friend.
Author notes
sixain; the meter is consistent- I play with feet, so there will not be an exact syllable count.
In a list
A contest entry
- Sixains by cricketjeff.
1450 points, ended September 7, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow.. This was.. wow.. I never knew what a sixain was until this contest.. And I would say that you did such a wonderful job!! I really loved the imagery and emotion in this write! thank you very much for sharing.. And congrats on the HM!
Angel
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Don't know much about poetic styles but I know what I like, and really like the story here. Smiles and tears often do walk hand in hand but one will always cancel out the other.
I hope you stay focused on the bright light shining through your darkness
Joe
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yes, I believe that the poetic style and mechanics should always lie underneath the important things- that which is being written and felt; but let's face it- style is the sugar of writing...! thanks...
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This is really good I lik it.
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I love it
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Laugh and the whole world laughs with you, cry, and you cry on your own, is an often quoted phrase that could sum up this nicely put together verse. Good work, enjoyable and thoughtful. Cheers Tws...
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thanks; there are many topics in this piece; I'd argue the 'cry alone' part since we're all sitting at the same table! Maybe a quote like, "Laughing and crying in similar experiences draws us closer together..."
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I always work with feet and adore seeing other poets use polysyllabic ones. Wonderful poetry, this simply cries out for more stanzas, I wanted it to go on to establish your meter more firmly in my mind. Thoroughly enjoyed, great stuff, Not Bad!!!
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knowing what your 'not bad' means, I can be satisfied that I am making progress in the world of metered verse... (and becoming a good writer is such a slow and agonizing process...) and now, since I see several places that need improvement, I'm off to tinker; and maybe a third stanza will materialize... thanks
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