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calligraphy.

The loops wound over each other
connecting at all the ends
so they would never break apart..
          [It was like you and me]

But then the ink ran out,
and separated the blots on the page
into their own separate parts;
forgetting that they were ever attached
as a single entity.
          [Our blood ran dry,
          our hearts stopped beating as one]



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Thursday - Personification.

so i offically suck at personification.. but i REALLY liked this idea so i might go back and fix it eventually when i learn how to do this better..
anywhoo i personified cursive writing [and kinda a pen and ink..but that doesnt really count haha.]

ap name: thunder.xx.paradise

options contestooo OPTION #7: personification.

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  • letters to no one
    January 9

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    "The loops winded over each other
    connecting at all the ends
    so they would never break apart..
    [It was like you and me]"

    I think 'wound' may sound a bit better... but I dunno if that's how it is spelled...

    Oh so tired.
    3am, gotta keep commenting in somewhat intelligent language.

    Shelly
    xxx

  • ElectricBloom
    October 17, 2008

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    Ohhh,
    I love love love this.
    Personification earned you quite a few brownie points ^.^
    A beautiful poem with some lovely descriptive imagery.
    I'm literally left in awe.

    And I think you're the 3rd person to follow the one rule.

    I'm impressed =]

    I truly enjoyed reading this.

    ElectricBloom


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    October 8, 2008
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    a nicely written piece thanks for entering

  • amaranthine lover gold member
    September 11, 2008

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    To all contestants already entered, please put author's name and Amaranthine Lover in the author's notes so that I know who you are and that I know you read my rules, thank you!


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    August 29, 2008

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    I did get that you were personifying handwritting, as in our ownn... I liked how you compared the joined together of you and the person, to the letters being joined together. Quite nice really. Also, like people every once and a while we miss a joining and it just doesn't fit in right. Nicely done and you don't suck at personification lol. I do


  • aanika
    August 28, 2008

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    nice metaphor!
    calligraphy=relationship

    'forgetting that they were ever attached
    as a single entity.'

    i liiike.


  • written-in-ink
    August 28, 2008
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    aww this was really good

    yay

    see you can do a good job


    • etoile
      August 28, 2008
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      gaah i dunno if my personification worked well or not
      did it make sense to you? /is the length normal? or shud i maybe add something.. if i get another idea haha

      i failll.

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