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Feeling Seeing Hearing


I feel the warmth of your breath upon my face
Feel the strength of your hold upon your embrace
I feel your  heart beat into my soul
Feel so secure within your hold
I feel so alone when we are apart
Feel so alive when we walk in the park

I see your face within my dreams
See our love for what it means
I see your brown eyes so mysterious and deep
See them light up whenever we meet
I see our future when we look up at the stars
See all that we share become one, become ours

I hear your sweet voice call out my name
Hear your laughter, joy, sadness and pain
I hear you saying i love you
Hear that love in all that you do
I hear you singing sweet melody's
Hear you whisper sweet nothings to me

All of your love i feel, see and hear
And all that we are i treasure my dear.

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  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    January 28

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    This is very good.
    I enjoyed reading it .
    Thank you very much for your entry .
    Good luck in the contest.

  • Vera Rich
    November 21, 2008

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    I think you must have misread the rules of my "Celebrating poetry and poets" competition. For this piece does not seem to refer to either. I wish you luck with it elsewhere - but for this particular competition, it has to rank as a "non-starter".

  • piccola silver member
    October 31, 2008

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    this is filled with emotion and love. The rhyme needs a bit of work which will improve the flow and then you'll have a really nice write. Actually it is just the flow that needs some work ... the rhyme is fine. Thank you for entering

  • celadia
    October 31, 2008

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    I find the switching from 'I see' to 'See' interesting and the rhyme scheme flows well. And the uniformity of feeling doesn't get boring because you're changing from 'see' to 'feel' to 'hear'. good job.


  • No longer in use
    October 17, 2008

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    "I see your face within my in my dreams" Just fix up that line.

    This is truly a lovely and loving poem. It has lines of thought that all who has one who wish never to part from have thought. And it's true. All true. Wonderful write. Brillant.


  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    October 16, 2008

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    I feel the warmth of your breath upon my face
    Feel the strength of your hold upon your embrace
    I feel your heart beat into my soul
    Feel so secure within your hold
    I feel so alone when we are apart
    Feel so alive when we walk in the park

    Excellent!!! I love it and I can feel it!

  • raymondsgirl8708
    October 5, 2008
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    very nice write thank you for entering.


  • SchizoChic
    October 1, 2008

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    This is so sweet. It's so lucky to find love and have it be reciprocated. Best of luck to you in this contest


  • Kazytc
    September 23, 2008

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    Wow this is so full of tender feeling!

    Very nicely penned and full of love and feeling and so caressing on the soul filling the heart with joy and warmth. Beautiful sentiments and obviously penned from the heart.
    Lovely down-to-earth approach too which make a lovely change.
    Well done, love it, write on!
    Poetic Scouse Hugs,
    Kaz.
    Kazytc xx


  • Samplette gold member
    September 18, 2008

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    A very warming and loving piece of poetry. I enjoyed it, but it really doesn't fit the contest.
    Thank you for sharing.
    Sam


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    September 6, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry in the contest. A beautiful poem of love, but you appear to have a few typos and spell check might also help. Most of the rhyming is good, but you have some that could possibly be bettered.

    All the best at judging

    Sue and Jeff


    • funnybone
      September 6, 2008
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      thank you for pointing this out to me,
      i have took your advice and hopefully i have fixed it but please let know if you still see any errors.
      i have also looked at my rhyming but cant for the life of me come up with anything different!!!
      think i may have a touch of writers block (or a few to many wines) lol.
      so i'll have another look when i've a more refreshed mind..
      again thank you


  • Wall Door Salad
    September 6, 2008
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    very lovely and profound. thanx 4 entering


  • BabyCsAngel57
    September 4, 2008

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    Awwwwee!
    I adore this poem :


  • AnanCat
    August 29, 2008

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    Nice poem and lovely rhyme
    It is so romantic
    Please reread it again cause I found some repeated words or mistakes in typing..
    Good luck in the contest
    Anan.

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