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featherweight memory [haiku]

i held too tightly
to bittersweet memories
as they flew away

Author notes

so... i'm terrible with haiku...
but i thought i'd give this a shot.
hope it's what you're looking for!

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  • Mairi bheag gold member
    August 30, 2008

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    It's more a senryu than I haiku, I guess (if we count "senryu" as being a catch-all term for anything with the structure of a haiku but not the classical content). The main thing is - is it a good poem in its own right? Yes, I think it is.


  • SmartBrick
    August 29, 2008
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    AWESOME!No you are not terrible!(With haiku's that is!heheheh!J/K!)