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Bad Dream

could someone please wake me up
i just know it's a nightmare
it can't be real
could someone please wake me up
grab me shake me
pick me up and drop me
do whatever it takes to end this bad dream
i don't want to see the ending
i already know the story
a tragic tale of hurt fear and horror
same shit different day chronic internal wars
please could someone wake me up
this nightmare's become too much
skin's cold to the touch
please wake me up
enough give me love
my heart was ripped up
wake me up
lift me up
slam dunk
don't give a fuck
just please
wake me up
wake me up
WAKEMEUP!

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help.

it's choppy, a work in progress, gimme some ideas to fix it

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  • Emerald-Spirit
    August 29, 2008

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    Great start. I think the ending could be a bit different though. But this is a good write overall. Xds-gX