I remember that night like it was just yesterday;
The night our fragile skin touched for the first time.
I, in my best suit, and top hat; a cane in my calloused hand
And you, with your rosy cheeks and vigorous smile,
wrapped up in an elegant cream-colored gown,
unlike anything I had ever seen before.
I didn’t understand this sudden pounding in my ribcage
or the way my throat felt like it was on fire,
but I did know when you caught my gaze,
that someday you would change my life.
Then the tune of a waltz slowly began to play,
igniting the entire room with joy and a lightness
I hadn’t felt since childhood. I got up to ask you to dance.
And oh, how we danced that night!
The warmth of your slender hands numbed me
and your curly ringlets tickled my face,
but I didn’t care for we were spinning ’round and ’round
at such an exhilarating speed, never once stopping for a single breath.
I remember that night like it was just yesterday.
But here we are now, 50 years later.
And sweetheart, I can still see the beauty of your youth
beneath the wrinkled face and aching bones,
behind the clothes you’re forced to wear
so as not to reveal your sagging figure.
But I know that’s not enough anymore
because you’re leaving. For good.
Although I feel like I already lost you, so long ago.
The heartbeat’s still the same, but the smile is rusty and faded.
Those lips don’t part for me, but for another.
Please don’t forget to send me a letter or two.
I still have my wooden cane, from when we first met,
and sometimes I can still feel the pulsation of the music
lifting up my soul.
Sometimes, I can even feel you.
I hope you know that I’ll always remember you as you were the night you found me,
unlike anything I had ever seen before.
Author notes
Hey Angelflower,
I kinda used both quotes because I couldn't pick between them, lol, hope that's okay! 
“Music is what feelings sound like.”
Unknown
“Those who danced were thought to be quite insane by those who could not hear the music.”
Angela Monet quotes
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This was such a wonderful write! I really love how soft this was, how loving the memories were as well.. Thank you very much for sharing this.. I really loved it.. Best of luck in the contest..
Angel
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wow. this was amazing
firstly i LOVED the picture
and the way you wrote for it was brilliant.
i loved the second half
it was so sad and beautiful at the same time.
i really liked the story behind this
thanks for entering and goodluck
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Great poem! The picture fits perfectly. It's so bittersweet...I love the wording 'and sometimes I can still feel the pulsation of the music lifting up my soul.' Gorgeous!
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Awww this is such a sweet and loving piece,
beautiful and sad at the same time.
Very nicely done, I enjoyed a lot.
Justgot2loveme
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Those lips don’t part for me, but for another.
Please don’t forget to send me a letter or two.
I still have my wooden cane, from when we first met,
and sometimes I can still feel the pulsation of the music
lifting up my soul.
wow.
good luck in the contest,
this was an amazing piece
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Awww :]]] HOE THIS IS AMAZINGLY TEARFULLY BEAUTIFUL. I love your use of imagery in this piece, and how it was written like a story of two people falling in love, and how love isn't always enough. Gawd, you penned this perfectly.
-I didn’t understand this sudden pounding in my ribcage
or the way my throat felt like it was on fire,
but I did know when you caught my gaze,
that someday you would change my life.
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That's what I felt, once upon a time. & he did change my life, more for the worse than the better, but we all know that story. haha. Wonderful use of metaphors in those lines, too, love. Astounding
-The heartbeat’s still the same, but the smile is rusty and faded.
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I'm not even sure WHY, but that line was my favorite out of the wholeee poemmm. It was so vivid & deep, especially. See! I told you you could gain inspiration from a picture. I love ittt =]
ily my bffl<3333
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