Goodbye is unbearable,
so I leave without any
regrettable exchange of words—
probably best that way.
Thoughts in gray and brown
invade my mind, but I must
spread my hope on a higher plane.
Uplifted by the wind,
my eyes follow the flight
of a single white feather;
the click of my rosary
punctuates my silent journey,
each fingered bead a prayer for justice.
Author notes
2)goodbye, leave, way, brown, mind, spread, bead, wind, feather, click
A contest entry
- The Prompt Coffee House: Prompt Challenge Round 3: Word Banks by Ceridwens Soul.
1050 points, ended September 12, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments and constructive criticism welcome.
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Beautifully written! You wove the words together quite well.
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Well Done! :)
a write to be proud of...
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Whoa what a cool little poem...I can definitely appreciate this. Well done!
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majestic
a write to be proud of, i have read published books that have set the scene to the same standard as this work, so excellent, your writing i feel is a professional level of competence, well done, good for you friend -
This was a lovely poem I enjoyed reading this very much so
Goodbye is unbearable,
so I leave without any
regrettable exchange of words—
probably best that way.
i like this the most in your poem
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The imagery of this piece has hidden depth. You take the reader on an emotional journey, yet leave them with a sense of faith of rightness prevailing.
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interesting
this is very unique to me, its not my common read really. i do however enjoy it. its a much deeper write than i think most would see. great job -
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Thank you, RebelJester
for the read and the comments. I truly appreciate it.
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Thankyou for your entry and Good Luck !
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