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infinite

Like the red in your wine
reflected through the light and the glass
its a sleepy kind of dreaming
this warmth and comfort
like a lovers arms
untouched
time seems to stop in its track
every moment becomes a picture
eyes closed
lips barely touching
a second of bliss
a taste of sweet
a single moment
a perfect connection 
just a touch of infinity
like you could stay in this place,
in my arms
forever

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  • nevadapoet
    September 1, 2008

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    A beautiful and clever write with great flow and great imagery. A perfect entry for the contest...I thank you for that. Best of luck.
    Nevadapoet


  • RestlessDreamer
    August 29, 2008

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    I love you word choices and how you perfectly described how being in love feels. The next time I kiss my fiance I will probably think about your words because they are so beautiful. Great job!

  • aaaaaaaa
    August 29, 2008

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    I love this. love how you build and build for the end, makes it all the more powerful. if you want a suggestion though I think taking away the one 'forever' from the 3rd to last stanza will make it 100x better since there's another forever 3 words away for the ending.

    thanks for sharing, good luck in the contest.