The nights are forty hours long
and I keep hearing our love song
you didn't even tell me why
just walked away and let me cry.
I guess the writing's on the wall
I walk to town and scour the mall
why does it have to be this way
why can't we make up, sorry say
I guess you never really knew
or maybe you're just being cruel
I'd take you back, give me a chance
then we can make some more romance
I can't keep goin' on like this
I need your love, your touch, your kiss
maybe I'll lie right down and die
and maybe you won't even cry.
A contest entry
- Awesomely Sad Poems by Toxic Stardust.
475 points, ended September 1, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you Think???
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Not quite sad enough to be cliche but a good efort all the same .thank you for your entry
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This is a pretty good poem. I did notice that in the third stanza it was supposed to be "you're" instead of "your". It's still a good poem. Good Luck!
Much Love and Keep Writing,
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Nice job. I enjoyed the poem and the rhyme.
Mike
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Oooh, I didn't realize there was rhyming until I got to the end. Wonderfully written. I can definitely see the sadness in this poem penned beautifully. Keep it up & good luck in that contest ♥
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Thanks, so glad you liked it, YESSA!
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