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Punishment ( HM )

Bleed not my pain,

hurt is a scenario,

sentenced trial,

victim of the convicted,

prisoner held in iron cell.

 

Crave release,

dignity faced judged the jury,

hammer the table,

man in wigs of white,

following laws abiding,

points blunt a finger.

 

Cries from the back bench,

hollow out,

unbelieving the verdict,

crimes once love,

ended that day.,

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Whispers in the dark

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  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    September 12, 2008

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    Brilliant

    the opening line is outstanding. wow, this poem is intense, and powerful to me. this speaks in volumes. the imagery that you have through out this piece is brilliant and this poem is absolutely wonderful.. I love this one so much..
    I really enjoyed reading this, and I could read it over and over again.

    good luck in the contest

    kat


  • Dark Otter
    September 10, 2008

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    Just had to stop by!

    This is the best piece that I've have ever seen of yours. From start to finish this is an extraordinary piece. You deserve the recognition you got for this.


  • Angelflower
    August 30, 2008

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    Oh wow.. You did such a wonderful job!! I really love how intense this write is.. you really brought out a lot from the picture!! thank you very much for sharing!! best of luck!


    Angel


  • maralisa silver member
    August 29, 2008

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    a brilliant poem julie full of pure powerfully penned justice with some great imagery and strong emotion good luck in the contest my friend maralisa


  • Lil-Bit Crazy
    August 29, 2008

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    great job here.. wooooooow.... ur sooo awesome.... sorry ive been away.... how are you doing....? hugs... ive missed ya.....!!!!!!!!!


  • Sanshay
    August 29, 2008

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    This is a very strong write and seriously if I waslitigatedI think you could write the brief.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    August 29, 2008

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    Oh wow hun, this is wicked! You have captured it for sure, couldn't have put the feelings better myself. An excellent job! The two opening lines are really stunning, and it continues throughtout, superb! All the best in your contest hun


  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    August 29, 2008

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    Composed with your continued mastery--Very well done and I admired the opening stanza in particular.
    Good luck, Julie, in the contest!


  • Age of Rain
    August 28, 2008

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    'Bleed not my pain,
    hurt is a scenario,'

    This is EXCELLENT! I mean, I was really wowed by this.

    'hammer the table,
    man in wigs of white,'

    Very vivid imagery.

    'Cries from the back bench,
    hollow out,
    unbelieving the verdict,
    crimes once love,
    ended that day.,'

    WHAT and ending. I think this is a favorite of yours for me. I really loved it.


  • Swtpoetryman
    August 28, 2008

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    HERE COMES THE JUDGE!

    A fine piece, indeed - and them British courts sound just like our courts in the states - the only difference being that the judges don't wear white wigs - they may wear a darker colored wig to cover up their pink and bald heads that resemble a babies' rump unadorned - or they are a member or hair club for men - unless their fans of Kojak, Bruce Willis, or Captain Picard from Star Trek - The Next Generation! An interesting take on the picture prompt to say the least, Julie! GOOD LUCK in this contest,
    Baby!
    Love & Peace!
    Earl.


  • In Too Deep1
    August 28, 2008

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    Wow! I am an attorney, but could never pen the intricacies of litigation in such elegant words of song the way that you have. Simply beautiful. As always, your pen is gifted, and most appreciated. An enjoyable read, and best wishes in the comp


  • daviscth silver member
    August 28, 2008

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    WOW! I love the opening lines you used for this sis and the title couldn't be more perfect. Good luck in the contest....

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