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Deceiver

In vanity,

you fell from grace.

Deceive the earth,

with your disgrace.

 

Filled the thoughts,

of every man.

Embedded fear,

your dreadful plan.

 

You dim the light,

so we can't see.

Your darkness blinds,

humanity.

 

We walk in circles,

without the light.

Cause the soul,

to suffer blight.

 

Through your pain,

your despair.

Instilled your hate,

because you fear.

 

The loss of One,

whom you love.

Who dismissed you,

from above.

 

Revenge is yours,

to destroy mankind.

Souls in darkness,

evil entwined.

 

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  • darrylblacksr
    November 8, 2008
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    This is reality and truth...

    Congrats on the trophy even though you should have won the gold one instead. Yes the deceiver don't want the truth about him reveal and will hide it at any cost. But we see now and pray to our lord and saviour to help defeat his attempts to blind us...


  • Angelo di Luce gold member
    November 5, 2008
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    A nice write as such, though there is no deciever there, is all a myth made by the organised religion to put fear into people so as to keep them her faithful sheep
    Having said this. I would like to state that man should accept rensposibility for his actions and not try to load his impendiments on to the Devil
    nicely done with a pinch of salt.


  • aboomer silver member
    November 3, 2008
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    Love the wording - and your flow is beautiful! So smooth.
    I especially like,

    'We walk in circles,
    without the light.
    Cause the soul,
    to suffer blight.' - so true. We humans do seem to walk in circles, don't we....

    Nice job! Congrats on the well-deserved trophy!


  • Jalalbad gold member
    November 2, 2008
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    GREAT WRITE!
    satan is jealous of God's Sons and Daughters.


  • FreeTara
    November 1, 2008

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    The evil is indeed entwined and if we chose we could seek revenge but i don't believe that was His plan
    Great poem remarkable


  • Venugopal gold member
    October 30, 2008

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    Revenge is yours,

    to destroy mankind.

    Souls in darkness,

    evil entwined.

    so profound, an eye opener

    Venu


  • Rovingone gold member
    October 24, 2008

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    A very good description of the greatest king of liars. You spelled it out quite plainly. I must say, you never cease to amaze me Kathy!

  • deepheart
    October 23, 2008

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    An honest and much needed portrait of the enemy of our souls. Thankfully we have already one the battle because greater is He who is in us then he who is in the world.


  • Rachel Kruger
    October 23, 2008

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    Very well done!

    Beautifully written. So true that the loss of One can cause so much misery and deceit.

    Congratulations, a trophy well deserved.

    Blessings,
    Rachel.


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    October 22, 2008

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    A relatively gentle yet no less pointed and pertinent description of the 'mis-leader'.

    Very well done!

    Sol


  • catalyst.
    October 6, 2008
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    I love the story in this intwined with a message. The rhymings also brilliant


  • AsIThink gold member
    October 2, 2008
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    Excellent!

    You penned this so well. He is a sneaky little 'twit' isn't he? Yeah, but "Revenge" may be his aim but he can ONLY call. We can avoid and ignore him... In this case, light is better (and stronger). This was great Pisces...congrats on the trophy! Well earned.

    AsIThink...


  • Flowergirl
    September 28, 2008

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    very nice i am not a fan of long but when my interest is caut through the hole thing like this one did i really enjoy them so great write and keep it up...

  • jules4je
    September 16, 2008
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    wow

    that was really good a real wake up call he is the uultimate lyer but god has won the victory


  • who iam
    September 15, 2008

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    Great!

    This is a unique "picture" of the Angel who fell from grace,and whom now plagues us every day .
    Yet by being strong he will not win,his is not the Master's plan!
    Well done. my friend.
    God bless
    It is Gold to Me!


  • penman gold member
    September 15, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. A great creation for the contest and so well worded. Congratulations on the bronze.

  • darrylblacksr
    September 11, 2008

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    Congrats on your trophy and thanks for the crystal clear message that is revealed in this poem. I thank you for sharing it with me. God Bless you...


  • blackrosesteph
    September 6, 2008
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    wonderful poem, I loved it


  • Sandygram
    September 6, 2008

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    Wonderful Poem!!!!!!!!

    A wonderful poem. Yes it is easy to fall into the devil's traps when despair hits the heart and mind. Hopefully in the end our faith is strong enough to overcome. An excellent poem and a pleasure to read. Take care.

    Bless You,
    Sandy


  • Meme Wheeler
    September 5, 2008
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    Oh, yes this is a good one! We know Lucifer was such a beautiful creature... magnificently created! He swelled with pride and envy of God, and rebelled. I once wrote a poem such as this one. I thought people would not understand my write about him. It is not to glorify his deceit in anyway. Very well written!

    Meme


  • Shakes-spear
    September 4, 2008

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    And this one fell with a thump!

    This is a very well written poem. dark in nature, but the message is clear. We should not try to decieve others. It will come back to haunt you in the end. This seems dark, but sheds light! The Shaker


  • MissxoxMassacre
    September 1, 2008
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    This shows so much emotion, which makes it wonderfully magnificent. Very powerful indeed.
    -JM<3


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    August 28, 2008

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    Bravo!

    This is powerful my dear & a great depiction of the fallen one & his agenda! I know you'll do well in the contest! Great content, timing & rhyming.
    Nice job with this. All the best in the contest!


  • echo-ink
    August 28, 2008

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    WOW WOW WOW

    This is awesome, sis...boy didn't you say a mouthful here. and all of it true. love you and good luck in the contest. ME


  • Swangrnv gold member
    August 28, 2008

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    WOWEE!

    Goodness! this is very differentr for you sis! wow, miss sunshine has a dark side!? l.o.l. great write my fav. sis!

  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    August 28, 2008

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    Hello.

    I think this is written well, rhythm adhered to very well, lovely musical feel to it, could almost be joyous if it wasn't for the subject, ahhaha. Rhyme done well, flows nicely. On a personal level I agree with some of what you say, but do not agree at all with the "soul to suffer blight", but then as I am sure you know, I have very strong beliefs on soul. Overall, a good piece. I wish you well in the contest.

    My regards.

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