around 8 i felt my world
fall under
one night sitting up
staring out into the dark alley
my mind would not quit
so i did
at 11 i learned that houses
were not homes
and family was so much more
than the people who shared
a bloodline
14 years into this thing
a man came along
who took the only power i still possessed
my body
and did away with any sense i had left
in my head
16 brought in a boy
who could make the up and down
collide long enough
to have me falling
again and again
for the same stupid tricks
and also confronted me with death
for the first time
baby booming at 17
belly looming out into the world
like my sins were displayed
for the world to see
instead of tucked in my panties
where i thought they hid
four days into 18
baby came and for once
i understood unconditional love
on a level that never even occurred
in damaged minds like mine
20 found me homeless
hungry for a love
that no longer existed in my world
found me
bruised up and beat down
making choices are not my strong suit
the wrong ones kept piling up
like dead bodies in a war
at round 22
a woman entered the ring
for a brief time she shined
like a star
my faith grew into and from her
until at
round 26
we knocked each other out
right out of the ring
and into the crowd of spectators
that always knew better than us
27 flew in and brought me ever closer
to the 30 i now long for
maybe a new era is just what i need
to keep me in the game
Author notes
my life so far.. a peek in
In a list
A contest entry
- Write Me a Chronology by chordphrute.
450 points, ended September 3, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I love the use of numbers within poetry - thank you for entering!
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Like the narrative quality of this and the way the mood is evoked through the use of language - great metaphor in 'like my sins were displayed/for the world to see/instead of my panties/where I thought they hid' this really suggests the situation in vivid detail. Thanks for sharing an insight into a life - good cluk in your contest.
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great!
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Very nice how you explored your own life from begining until now and was able to analyse it like this. Nice write and good luck in the contest.
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I really like this peek into your soul... well done.
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very nice - thanks for your entry!
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