shades of blue mold together,
forming a [shelter] over my head.
white misshaped blotches,
just barely touching the surface.
my shoes scrape across grey cement,
as [dead] leaves crunch under my feet.
.inhale through my nose;
let it escape through my mouth.
(just remember to breathe)
the wind tickles my skin as it blows by,
i swear i can hear it whispering in my ear.
"i love you baby..forever."
[and for just a second]
i can feel your cold lips pressing against mine,
and your arms holding my body tight.
.shake it all off;
blink a couple times.
(just don't let go of reality)
the smell of fall lingers everywhere,
and the autumn chilliness blankets my body.
my legs just want to cave in to the ground,
allow my body to just freeze in time.
memories swim through my veins like poison,
making me remember then and lose track of now.
.hold the tears in;
stop the pain in your heart.
(just let it all go)
[like the leaves let go of their branches
and crumble underneath of your feet.]
Author notes
Its about memories of a lost love eating me; there are so many memories in fall I really can't stand to be outside. And the lost loves name is Autumn which makes it all worse.. When people refer to fall as "autumn" it brings all the thoughts back faster-- I've grown to hate this time of year.
And I wrote it to get it out because I was walking home from school one day and it all flooded back through my body.
Sorry if this isn't what your looking for. Lol.
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Enchanting
though sad, this was a lovely reflection
of true love in its purest form.
Life my dear is a collection of memories
and this one was precious. Learn to embrace
those cherished moments in time. Even if they
come with the great pain of lost. Great job
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Thanks. Your comment made me feel weird; good weird. Like somehow helped me come out of this gloomy mood a little bit. Thanks. =) I guess you should cherish memories even if they inflict pain. I like how you said life is a collection of memories; So true now that I think about it.
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This left me speechless. I've never read anytihng this ... ech I can't even think of a word for it.
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Thanks. <3
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great poem
your emotional content was definitely there and well conveyed
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Thanks.
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Love it ♥
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Thanks.
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I love how you use the brackets. It's very creative! Well written my darlin. Great job!
Warmest,
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Thanks! <3
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x a million
This is really sad. I know how it is to try not to get lost into the past, and how hard it is to get out of it. I wish I could take your pain away, I love you lots.
You did an amazing job with this poems.
Your getting really, really good.
Good luck in the contest sissy.
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Yeah, Im trying though. Maybe thats whats bringing me down so much more; because Im trying so hard. I dont know.
And I dont wish you could; You don't need to feel like this. I love you lots to.
Thanks.
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