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Delicacies

Luscious strawberries
along with grapes from the vine
bring to face a smile

Assortments of chocolate
also make one feel divine

Though nothing beats warmth
from a sweet lover's embrace
to invigorate

Be it June or December
in any form of weather
 
 

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  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    September 18, 2008

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    Well there's quite a choice of delicacies to choose from. Can go a few ways with this, so I would say someone knows what kind of writing I like. Nicely done. Thank you for entering and good luck. Storm


  • Cannonsfire
    August 28, 2008

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    Ok well I haven't go the embrace but I sure as hell have chocolate lol


  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 28, 2008
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    Hope This Brings Smiles To Such A Sweet Sis!

    Bravo, and all the best, peace, bro Timothy


  • notorious gold member
    August 28, 2008
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    *eye-rolls*

    I'm listening to that "farting" song...to be fair, it's a synthesized fart...Money Honey by Lady Gaga
    w00t

    So anyways...I will make an attempt at seriousness in "analyzing" your poem.

    "Luscious strawberries
    along with grapes from the vine
    bring to face a smile"
    HELL YEAH!!
    Apparently puppies can't have grapes or raisins...I wonder about strawberries, what with the seeds & shit...I like this fruitiness.

    "Assortments of chocolate
    also make one feel divine"
    Shit yes...Godiva chocolates? Those cost like $100...LMAO okay that was an exaggeration, but yeah. The divinity is in MONEY, not fucking Jesus.

    *is not being very PC*

    "Though nothing beats warmth
    from a sweet lover's embrace
    to invigorate"
    This is where my eye-rolls are getting handy.

    "Be it June or December
    in any form of weather"
    Okay, that is a groovy ending. It's unique, probably true, and very well...AWESOME.

    This kinda reminds me of "Words only flutter so deep/dependent on weather", or whatever the hell that line was in our first collab.

    Very very cool.

    It's always friggin rainin' in Vancouver!
    Meh...


    I liked this. It's smile-inducing.
    All that fuckin food...

    *has met quota for swearing*

    I really should stop swearing on comments for your poems...LMAO

    Satan smokes
    ,
    Jessica


    • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
      August 28, 2008
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      Yeah I am going to have to adjust to the rain thing in the Seattle area.

      Thanks for the comment.

      I don't mind swearing.


      • notorious gold member
        August 28, 2008

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        Swear words are kind of a perception, aren't they? All words are perceptions to represent something...*gets all deep*

        Umbrellas are so kick-ass!!!


        • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
          August 28, 2008

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          Yeah they are. When we had the storm here I borrowed someone's and thought, "Wow this is just neat to carry around"


          • notorious gold member
            August 28, 2008
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            LMAO! In Vancouver, they're carried all the time. It's raining in the summer for frickety dick's sake!!! Or at least, it was. I haven't looked out the window recently.


  • Nature Song silver member
    August 28, 2008

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    From June till december...or simply any weather. A interlude with a love...is always nice! ~Sie

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