Tucked between the
Tigris and Euphrates,
lies a coveted sanctuary.
Nearing the end of my days,
I look back cross the portals
of time, quietly remembering.
Eden, that blessed respite, in
my memory of long ago. For now
alone, my light grows dim.
My heart weakens, I sleep often.
As I do, I dream of a land
pristine and unblemished.
Lush foliage, hanging in
woven canopies. Scents of
tropical blossoms permeate.
Luscious fruit hanging seductively,
craving, an allure of touch. Each
longing to be caressed by the mouth.
Lustrous ribbons of crystal blues
caper, gurgling, lauging like children
dancing beneath a benevolent summer sun.
Their songs lift into a cerulean sky,
clear voices mingle, in harmony with
the rejoicing notes of an avian choir.
Oh the immortal strains bursting
forth onto a doe eyed consciousness
deep in death’s semblance, at rest.
Even now I hear Eden speaking…
"I ponder your life,
son of my heart,
such difficulties you've faced.
Perhaps it's time for you
to return to my embrace,
let me hold you for eternity.
Never again will the toils of life
burden your spirit,
safe you will remain in my garden."
Author notes
We used the third prompt, that being the words Unblemished.
Photocredit: User id, lilacwest@photobucket.com. Picture entitled Garden of Eden
A contest entry
- Collaboration Contest.... by kiwigirljacks.
1225 points, ended September 8, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A very beautiful write which had a feeling of peace and serenity being bestowed in it! A wonderful use of the prompt and blended together seamlessly!
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This poem has a lovely feel to it - very beautifully crafted and such a serene tone! The picture fits perfectly and the whole thing just makes me want to daydream
wonderfully done - and good luck in the contest!
Keep writing
Polly
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we stand to cheer and applaud!
I feel as if took a soothing bath in the gardens of
eve and poetrys luscious waterfalls!
Way to write, the both of you!
OH...this was so flowing and capturing to read,
we couldn't take our eyes away from it our souls just
wanted to breathe it all in..every line and imagery!
A FEAST I say, A Feast of divine poetry!
ears/Seattle
p.s.
I really liked it!
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What Kind Words,
you have left behind. Speaking for Luck and myself, we are grateful that you found such pleasure in the offering.
Only if it were so simple to return to such a storied place and existance. May you find continued success in your own poetic endeavors. May your dreams be stepping stones along your path of reality.
Blessings to you
Niaish
Silent Hawk
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this one is a very thoughtful kind of write that I really enjoyed reading. Truly, many have their hearts set to the reward of living in Eden again, that is, if faith is with it...
tnsx for writing such a good poem...
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I do believe this is where the song
the sweet bye and bye comes from when we all go home the the beauty of His house( the massnion in the sky....mac
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