Who am I?
I am the one
who is alone
while sitting in a crowd.
Who am I?
I am the one
who watches while others
laugh and point
making fun of my clothes,
my hair,
my looks.
Who am I?
I am the one
who cries out in pain
and sorrow
as the boy she likes
never notices her.
Who am I?
I am the one
who never feels confidant.
Always searching
but never finds.
Who am I?
I am the one...
the many...
the few...
Who am I?
I
simply
am...
Author notes
I felt this way growing up... Meeting my husband made my life so much better. But school was HELL for me.
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A contest entry
- Anything & Everything Old or New by piccola.
600 points, ended August 30, 2008, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Who Are You? by AngelOfDarkness88.
350 points, ended September 5, 2008, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-writes, new poems, Anything by Hello...No.One.Home.
525 points, ended September 24, 2008, 104 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Bored... I Want SAD by upperworld06.
360 points, ended October 1, 2008, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything Goes by Flowergirl.
750 points, ended September 28, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Little bright eyes by Neha Sharma.
1100 points, ended September 30, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter your favorite poem that hasn't won anything by whispernthedark.
745 points, ended October 4, 2008, 73 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Best of Poetry by headintheclouds.
450 points, ended October 30, 2008, 44 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Who are you? by zammy.
700 points, ended October 14, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Day of Silence by AshesFromFire.
800 points, ended May 2, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Amen. I totally had the same thing, and I used to do other things just to try and make people think I was cool. I remember I memorized a whole green day album b/c they were cool. Never realizing that being cool is just about being yourself despite what others say. Great job on showing the emotions that go along with feeling this way. Great write!
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Your words make my heart hurt. I see this so often amongst kids..the cruelty
I'm so glad you've found comfort in your own skin.It's a great place to be.
Stacy
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Aw, this is filled with such sadness and displacement. Your words touching and heartfelt.
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Nice
Strait to the core
Everyone is themselves
Very nice.
The only thing that I find odd is that it seems to be very sad about who you are...then the last line has a lot of strength....
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This is really beautiful and deep. And i can definately relate to this 100% . Excellent work.
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wow.... truly beautiful and I can see why it was nominated, there are a lot of ppl who can cope and I include moi! nicely done!
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Thank you I do like this one myself. It is truly me. I feel this way and always have. I am different. And it took me a long time to realize that it was okay to be different.
Thanks for the wonderful comments.
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Gosh, I can so relate to this piece of yours!
It's a terrible position to find yourself in especially when you are still young. Good luck to you in all
of these contests my friend!
Jeremy0826
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I love to share my work with you guys. Makes me feel good when you guys tell me you like them. I haven't been told enough that I write well. Can actually remember an old English teacher in high school say to me that I would never write well. Hummm... wonder what she would say if she saw what I write now.
Thanks for commenting.
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A great poem you have here. I am glad things are better.
Ronin
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yeah they are. I am glad too. Thanks for commenting.
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Nice expression of the meandering thoughts that flow through our brain!
Mariana
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glad that you liked it. Thanks for commenting
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Amazing job. I'm glad things got better ^.^
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yup. Thanks for commenting.
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a great piece! so simple and yet so powerful and telling so much.
way to go!
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thanks glad that you liked it. I do too. One of my favorite writes.
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See now this is an example of a poem that doesn't use too many words but still tells me quite a bit about you! I appreciate that! I too had awkward moments growing up (heck, I'm still growing and STILL have awkward moments!). Thanks for entering and good luck
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Good luck in my contest!
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I feel like I really connect to this poem. Even though people dont stare at me I still feel the way you do. My poetry is like yours in many ways. Except Im only 12>
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I hear ya, school was its' own kind of hell. Great write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
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whisper
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this is nice. I used to feel the same in school. but the entry does not makes up for the contest. Thanks for entering. Better luck next time.
_Neha
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wow awsome i loved it full of emotion very nice thanks for the entery....
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wow i really like dis poem. As a teenager your poetry speaks out the truth of how I as well as many other teens feel. We all question ourselves as to who we are at one point of life or the other.. nice write.. -
yeah, i think school's like that for a lot of people. great job with this though, i really like it. good luck
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Hopefully, this is not a self-portrait, and from reading you I am sure that it is not...although we all have felt this way, I'm sure, at one time or another. A well written poem with lots of insight!
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actually it is me. That's why I was able to write the pain... cuz I have felt it. Life growing up was not fun for me.
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" am the one
who is alone
while sitting in a crowd." ooh i love this
i love the ending GREAT job
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thank you. Have you ever felt this way... a person can be alone in a crowd. I do it all the time.
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oh yeah all the time
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Wow I'm so sorry if you feel like this, I know how teens are, they judge you for your cover and not for yourself. And many people dont understand that this has a big influence on a teens mind, It can come to suicide or just having a low self-esteem! And can lead to a not so great life in the coming years. I'm glad you find that special someone.
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Yes, a persons teenage years can be very rough on someone. However, as an adult I get to make my own decisions on things and not have to follow what others tell me to. So I have no one to blame but me if my life isn't what I want it to be.
However, now that I am sharing my life with this wonderful man... well life is good. Thanks for commenting on my poem. Glad that you seem to understand where I was coming from. Hugs
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This I understand!
I know that feeling of never, ever fitting in!
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I know this feeling well. When I was in school we moved a lot too. My dad was in and out of jail; our mom drank, we'd get evicted and somehow manage to move on. I eventually gave up trying to get good grades as I could never concentrate ... never had friends either until about 9th grade. Once in high school it went back to being a loner and multiple suicide attempts because I never learned coping skills. Of course that was before I married and had children and grandchildren. Once that happens it's hard to ever be alone again
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i love this poem for its so true i love this line
Who am I?
I am the one...
the many...
the few...
Who am I?
I am...
awsome writhe keep it up
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Thank you. That's my favorite part too.
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Wonderful
Very creative and so well expressed. A terrific creation. Best of luck in the contest.
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thanks for your wonderful comments on all my poems. Glad that you liked them.
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I can relate to these words as i had a tough time at school, actually i had a tough time till i left home. Sometimes we need other people to bring out the qualitys we possess and to remove the darkness from within by bathing us in the light of love. I hear ya on this one, well spoken my friend
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However, pain does make us a better writer don't you think. I take the pain I have felt and put it into my writings. Don't you?
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You are obviously a poet of great stature, this was really great, I really enjoyed the read, great job, blessings John, Live Long and Prosper
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Thank you! Your words made me blush. I appreciate your words.
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There are a select handful that speak of happiness in school. The jocks, the cheerleaders, the rich ... they seem to be the ones who did well in school as well. They overcame adversity if indeed they had any ... school was fun for them. They joined clubs, the school paper and joined in. I think I waited for an invitation from the world not knowing that it was I that needed to become a part of things ... well, thanks for entering.
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I didn't wait for an invitation. Every time I tried to start something new... life jumped in and changed it for me. The moving constantly wasn't a good thing. By the time I was in 5th grade I had been to 6 schools.
By that time I had learned how not to make friends. Why bother. I'll be leaving here again soon.
So what I did was turn into myself. I began reading. My books were my friends. I would read for hours and hours.
It set me apart from the other kids and they would torture me about it. They would attack me physically. They would make fun of me because I was reading something. They would (the few times that I tried) refuse to let me play whatever games they were playing.
I learned early on it was better to be a loner.
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Life for me was the same way
Growing up. It wasn't 'til I got to college that it got better. I can really see why you relate to Spock so well. Reminds me of the first movie, where he says "There comes a time in every being's life, when they turn to a brother, a friend, a god, and ask 'Is this all that I am? Is there nothing more?'"
Good write! Keep penning!
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I hated school lets just say that they were horribly cruel to me. That they caused me a lot of horrible pain.
And yes, I think that you are correct that is why I feel so close to Spock. He never felt like he belonged either... at least not until he met Kirk.
Thanks for sharing your comment with me. And thanks for the comments on the poem. I appreciate it.
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Very heartfelt and wonderful. It's a sincere look at who you are. Very well. What had made me look to this is the phrase "Who Am I?" Which was my inspiration for the poem in which I wrote for this contest "Who are you?"
This is the poem. If you would like to read it.
http://allpoetry.com/poem/4552419
Wonderful poem. Uh..yours is...I'm sure mine is as well.
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Your poem is quite good as a matter of fact. Thanks for sharing it. And good luck in the contest too.
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This is very touching and deeply emotional ~ its a shame kids have to go through this at all. Best of luck in your contest I just love the way you questioned and then answered it made for an enjoyable read
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Thanks for the lovely comment on my poem Who am I.... I just wrote it in one sitting can you believe it. I thought it turned out well enough.
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