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On a Thursday she talks to the birds in her Yard

Missing image

 

 

The story so far:

shells have been broken, now like then

many times in-fracture

internal hell to where softer spoken loss

loses night to the gender of space

 

across from the bed-

the tall trees tap on the window

the magpie waits for her

she, has become black

& white

and greys too, impossible to know

where science meets sex

 

and merges inside whispers of colour

of beak and the bleakness of yesterday

 

in her case it is all a story of feathers

& wings that span under her diaphragm

pleading a pliable beat

understanding where each rib is formed

she tells the bird about Eve and Lilith

about ancient scribes that chart history

her history

and time waits for no man

or woman

 

or where sounds of nacre, separate shards

a collector of her many souls

never lost

the spare moments

parts of man

part woman

part bird

 

she has flight in mind

when the nuance of her bones

takes each synapse

captivates another seam of shinybright days

she is a thief

a tinker

a tailor to the stars

 

what wouldn't you do

to stitch more time

into your hands?

and weave magic into your life span

& let the magpie take an eye

and speak in tongues

 

she knows how birds fly south

for the winter in her bones

moves her body that way




 

 

Author notes

technically, i know magpies are birds, but in the animal, vegetable, mineral thing.. they come under animal!!!

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 5, 2008

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    Your take moves towards the deep of the story of human beings revealing the place of the woman here..and this is quite impressing my friend..well done...


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    September 22, 2008

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    What appears to me is:

    A supposed fragile container breaks its bonds, to loosen, transform and let pain escape, but this adaptability is actually of its greatest strength.

    Considerations, black and white judgements and greys of uncertainty. How do we distinguish between what is thought and what actually is?

    We are always left with 'what is', including its good and what we deem bad.

    We try to follow our heart, of what we are, collecting stories on the way. Must we always be in a particular story? Is there a bigger one beyond?

    Collected together, gathering to be simplified...

    Ready to take flight towards her natural desire.
    Is there still time for an acquired wisdom to transform things, before an ending...

    anyway, when stretched, we fall back to our natural instincts, rather than staying with trying to figure everything out. An instinct to simply keep moving and expand into the 'New'.

    ----------------------------
    I hope I'm close but whether my take is close or far, from that intended, is no real matter. The main thing is that this is the kind of angle and vision that I much hoped to see in this contest.
    All creatures are a part of our world we live in and in which we can see qualities of our own nature reflected. If it wasn't this way, I don't believe we would be able to admire, empathise or even have the beginning of an idea of what those different faces of nature are, or even come to understand our own.

    Here I see reflections and instincts to gather the necessities of life, so that there can be a moving on in an intended direction of happy survival. Knowing that everything is constantly in progress, even if we at times feel otherwise.

    Thank you for this, I like it very muchly indeed!
    and feel that I've most likely only just scratched the surface of the allusions that it contains.

    'she has flight in mind
    when the nuance of her bones
    takes each synapse
    captivates another seam of shinybright days
    she is a thief
    a tinker
    a tailor to the stars'

    And I particularly Love this part!!!




  • Cat gold member
    September 2, 2008
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    did i mention this makes me horny on about 5 different levels?

    i think this is your best poem.


    outstanding work

    m


    • NurseChilly gold member
      September 2, 2008
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      steady now girl, my heart can't take such horniness!! LOLOL - smiles
      - DO ME!!


  • Cat gold member
    September 2, 2008

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    god this is excellent- this just
    drips like rich cream sauce down the page..
    wow.. how did i miss this one?



    m


  • KyleBerg gold member
    September 2, 2008

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    This is beautifully written. Sometimes i struggle with getting into the rhythm of these types of poems, but with yours i had no trouble,, it flowed wonderfully. The line that i loved most was "of beak and the bleakness of yesterday".. i just think its great

    Lovely idea, skillful language, applause for you


  • DogFish silver member
    August 29, 2008
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    I'm not sure if I understand this...
    am I yearning for madness or for senility?


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    August 29, 2008
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    Yes 'Animal' even includes amoebas... so no worries!
    ... and thank you.


  • ArtFullyMe silver member
    August 29, 2008

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    what can I say.... but beautiful? I think this is one of the finest things I've read of yours.. the images are all wonderfully vivid and that ending simply sings..

    of flight, of knowing, and most definitely of being at home in the sky.. no matter where your wings find landing.


  • Cannonsfire
    August 28, 2008

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    C


  • Lucy.
    August 28, 2008

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    Oh...this is lovely! And a wonderful entry into the contest!!

    Did you take this piccie? Nice.


  • oleander
    August 28, 2008
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    It's a nice poem, I was having trouble grasping the concepts.


  • misselaineous
    August 28, 2008
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    collectors of souls

    lovely miss gilly ~ just like you


  • Grunts Girl silver member
    August 28, 2008
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    typo with hands? handas?
    there are so many lines in this that are incredibly origional and vivid and real..
    i loved the part of waits for no man or woman

    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 28, 2008
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      hehehehhe thankie miss heidi... and i love love love your keen eyes

      • Grunts Girl silver member
        August 28, 2008

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        not sure about keen.. just sober today lol

        • NurseChilly gold member
          August 28, 2008
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          hehehheh sam brown's??? or timothy taylors...

          • Grunts Girl silver member
            August 28, 2008
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            Guiness please lol


            • NurseChilly gold member
              August 28, 2008
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              - clink clink cheers luv

              i love guinness and black [a shot of blackcurrant cordial] that is!! real smooth and makes a pretty colour on the foamy head


  • Nicolette gold member
    August 28, 2008
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    ~ Nicolette


  • transcendental baby gold member
    August 28, 2008
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    Oh I love this!!!


  • Elora Danon gold member
    August 28, 2008

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    Gilly you've outdone yourself on this one. Just the tone alone lends itself to such a reverence. I almost found myself holding my breath at parts!

    "what wouldn't you do
    to stitch more time
    into your hands?"

    Fantastic! Truly, truly truly!

    I know I've been too quiet when it comes to speaking about my sisters' works.

    Well, that stops here. You have helped me find my voice and in the same instant, taken my breath away with this beautiful piece.

    Love you bunches


  • iverbthenoun
    August 28, 2008

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    doyal!!! (magpie!!!)... wowowowow this poem where do i start from??? omg i love this totally the parallel drawn between man, woman and the animal/bird is just brilliant
    umm that's it... i love this...


    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 28, 2008

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      thankie little you are shiny bright so come, sit in my nest... i steal things like you

  • Suzanne Dia
    August 28, 2008
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    "she is a thief

    a tinker

    a tailor to the stars"


    That .. is... dare I say it? Oh hell, I do.. That is brilliant.

    This is a beautiful piece of writing, Gill. I love how you've created a persona and life from magpies. I was considering entering this contest but hehehe, I donno now!

    Nah, this is really gorgeous Gill..

    Going in the bookmarks.

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