Did I ever tell you
about Sue's eyes?
the golden flecks nestled deep in burnt umber?
sparkling, dancing, laughing, entrancing...
I swear I saw them in a moment brimming
on that glistening palette
before vanishing
forever
into earth.
A contest entry
- gold _ co-sponsored by aj morelli by Cat.
1150 points, ended September 14, 2008, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Well...now I see her eyes. Well done, congratulations!
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the last four words create a very powerful image. shocked me at the direction it took.
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i just love this piece-
it is so simply complicated- nothing forced or
trite
just wonderful stuff
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good and sad
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Thank you Herr Logmeister. Sue has been good and sad lately.
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How creative, a wonderful description of the charm of a pair of enticing eyes and their owner. Best of luck in the contest.
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