Husband, spoken softly,
as I would say God,
would never look at me oddly
if I should say:
No, I want nothing else for Christmas
but a rose of velvet red ...
He would nod,
and solemnly declare:
For you, my rose so rare,
I have a rose to spare ...
He would not frown
upon me if I pick the first twig
of jasmine, but would crown
me with the fragrant sprig,
while pressing to my lips a kiss:
Sweet September jasmine wife,
you are my spring flower,
my life ...
He would wake me with a lily
in a vase;
he would call me Silly,
and would hug me in embrace
and show me his forever love,
just in case I should doubt ...
See: it is not difficult to be
the ideal husband for me ...
I have no other want or need,
but being the Eve in my Eden,
freed.
In a list
A contest entry
- An Ideal Husband by Frodofan.
380 points, ended September 10, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is beautiful...
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Exquisite Love
Any Adam would be proud to have you as his Eve and would be crazy not to make you his one and only wife. The idea expressed is simply beautiful in its' unconditional acceptance of the unity that bond between man and woman. Best wishes in the contest.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
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This is all I ever wanted to be ...
a one and only wife.
Now you have me in tears.
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Oh, does he have a brother? Or, being realistic, what is his father doing?
Your poem is like a waft of spring fresias. And of course the sky is blue.
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It is easy ...
his Father is God ...
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It is easy ...
his Father is God ...
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Why "Eva" and not "Eve?"
I love the idea hear. It is beautiful and simple and sweet and romantic. Creative too and original. I like the really soft dreamy quality of this piece. It's very lyrical.
Thanks for entering.
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Sorry ... lol
Eva is Afrikaans ... I changed it to Eve ... Typo, thanks!
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Romantic and beautiful, I like it very much. The rhymes are subtle but appear at the right time.
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and the observations thereof.
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