morning sunrise spreads slow heat
eggs reveal her flowing sticky side
lush and full she resonates old deceit
new spring daffodils brighten worldwide
seemingly ubiquitous she invades our pride
Author notes
prompt: write about a color
cinquain form
ababb
A contest entry
- Poetry Charades: Colors by Bitter Irony.
450 points, ended September 6, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wonderful
Very creative and well done. A great expression for the theme. Best of luck in the contest
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I see yellow...
yellow, everywhere
sliding resonating
into orange
teasing
she don't mind
if words don't rhyme
she takes her time
and she don't care
That's what I see...in your poem...I love poems that color the imagination, thanks for colouring mine!
John
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an interesting colage of ideas to carry out the view to the reader. I enjoyed the way you skipped across some popular associations to produce your picture.
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Let me guess...it’s yellow.
I’m not too sure about,
“lush and full she resonates old deceit”
Is this cowardice?
You’ve set me thinking once again.
Love, Peter
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Nice use of form! I'm a little unsure about the third line--compared to the flow of the rest of the poem, it feels forced.
I'm guessing your color is yellow!
Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck!
~Bitter Irony
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thanks
you are correct . . it is yellow . . the tempo slows after the third line and picks up for the fourth and fifth ..
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