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Invitation to a Kiss

If my lips
{they do}
like you

they'll touch

present
intent
on you

and to the point
of do (((I do)))
you want to

do
my lips

might you?

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  • nevadapoet
    September 1, 2008

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    a clever write with playful twists...Very well done.
    Good luck with the contests.
    Nevadapoet


  • Sick Sunshine
    August 28, 2008
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    strange... In a good way.

    I like the way you've written the poem and the background image. The poem itself is a taunt.


  • arafura gold member
    August 28, 2008

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    You are such a clever writer! You makes the words dance and the concepts jump through hoops... just for you. Beautifully written and sweetly sensual.


  • Frozentearz
    August 28, 2008

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    ooh just like a Dr Suess rhyme
    This was adoreable.
    Warm thoughts across the miles.
    Tearz


  • myrataal silver member
    August 28, 2008

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    Wow ...

    I loved this ... It is enticing. Really. The repetition worked well and also the sensual word play and confirmation ... Cute!



    Love
    Myra

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