I used to dream growing up
of living amongst the beautiful
forests and mountains.
Places where my heart enjoyed
during summer holidays camping
with my family since a little
girl of ten years old.
This love never died as I
saw the alpine flowers
and enjoyed that lovely
mountain air!
To even marry a forest
ranger so I could enjoy
this environment!
Fate didn't have it that
way. Marrying a farmer
the out of doors had
a big part of my life!
But back in my heart
and mind still dwelt
a little girl with the
mountain air still in her
lungs and the smell of
campfires, and cedar trees!
Many years after those days
someone asked me to give them
a muse on something to write.
Out of my psyche memories
came of a cabin in the mountains!
Who knew what idea that brought
from that moment!
Like building log by log
the dreams that came from that idea!
Not only structures and rooms
but dreams of warm fires,
big dreams and the love
that comes with not only
ones surroundings but love
that permeates one
to another!
All the hopes and dreams of
two dreamers looking for fufillment
beyond ones days lived beforehand
I have not stopped dreaming
as this musing has awakened
the little Sleeping Beauty
of the past.
Maybe some prince will come
along some day to awaken
her to life as she once
remembered it!
Love and that cabin
in the mountains!
(photo credit www. art.com)
Author notes
This write speaks for its self. A little girls dream, though not yet reality still
living as if the dream was fufilled
A contest entry
- Dare To Dream by piccola.
600 points, ended August 29, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Have I shared my dream adequately?
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loved the title it made me click it. and clicking it is good. the poem. well it is just awesome. i expected it to be after the title cause the title was just brilliant
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This poem is amazing. It has wonderful Imagery in it. I felt like i was in the mountains when I read this. Good job, and wonderful write. I can smell the mountain air as I read this.
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I liked it, story well told
ones surroundings and ones days should be one's, easy fix typos. This is a great story poem beautifully illustrated. What I think is unclear is what happened to the farmer, does sleeping beauty want her prince to rescue her from an unhappy marriage? Or, will the farmer be her prince. Are the two dreamers the little girl and the same girl as an adult? Poems should evoke questions and have mysteries, but I feel more clue are needed. nevertheless, in spite of all these questions, I did enjoy reading this beautiful dreamy poem. kudos.
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I like the poem, and how the picture draws the poem together.
what i didn't like was how the lining of the poem went: 3-4-4-3-4-6-5-4-7-3-4-4-2
when i was reading it, i felt like some of the lines were forced. the flow is good.
i will give a 4/5 for the poem, and 3/5 for the coloring. you get 4/5 for the message. and an 5/5 for the picture.
grand total of 16/20 -
I think this is a Beautiful Piece! I love the way you describe it, I can smell the air, feel the warmth of the campfire on my face.
Lovely poem.
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It is our dreams that make us whole, good poem!!!
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This my dear is a beautiful dream. You have shown alot of emotions and the imagery is so vivid one could just picture themselves in the forest camping with the scent of trees for miles around. Good luck my dear in the contest.
Brian
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Gorgeous!
This piece painted such a calm, warming feeling in my heart! I am a nature girl too, Not like camping in a tent and such but the esoteric feeling that wide open field, rolling hills, and mountainous structures can only provide! Beautiful write here! It's a winner in my book! I think sleeping beauty has already opened her eyes! Good luck and best regards! -
Beautiful view!
Can't wait to see how you make it jump off the page! Best of luck in the contest! Regards
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