Like a feather on the wind
Your presence in my sky
Leads me from my shadow
Into dreams of you and I
Like a feather on the sea
Your touch reminds me of
Our everlasting friendship
And peaceful flowing love
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Hands off my feather - he's mine.
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etheral in its composition
Hello gifted one, been reading through your poems on the sea. it was so hard to pick a favourite as i could loose myself in their writing.
However. On wind and sea has to be my favourite.
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Thank you for your thoughtful comments...
I appreciate the kudos, too!! Thanks for stopping in to read my work. I'll be over your way ASAP today. Take care!! 
Peace always, xx Cyn 
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This is so gracefully written with the gentleness of a feather. I love the metapor and image here. Simply beautiful!!
Sam
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Thank you for your thoughtful comments!!!
I'm glad you like my poem... What do you think of line three in the first stanza? It looks kind of strange to me. Now, after reading it the next day, I'm not all that comfortable with it, and want to change that line. Can you think of any other, better examples of a more interesting and/or fluid phrase? Thanks again, I appreciate your stopping by to read my work!!! Peace, Cyn
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leads me from the shadows
into dreams of you and I????
I like what you have...
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Thank you!!!!
I really love that line. Do you mind if I use it? I did make a slight change, what do you think?
Leads me from my shadow
Into dreams of you and I
Thanks again for your help, you're terrific!!! Peace, Cyn
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It's a lovely image and an even better poem. It flows sweetly down the page and is soft and gentle. A pleasure to read.
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Thank you, as always...
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