Oh unyielding tongue
Language hard as steel
Forcing me to make you kneel
And bend to my will!
Oh to let the story pour from my lips
with languid, flowing rhyme
Letters creating words in time
Instead of chiseled creations!
Oh roses of steel
How hard you grow
My resolve is fervent though
You cannot but comply.
With dawning light
When you have bent
And all my energy is spent
I'll smile for in the end I won!
Author notes
This poem speaks expressly to the difficulties of the lyrical poet!
How does this poem make you feel? What was your general impression?
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In the beginning the rhyming seemed to be too much for me, but I was wrong as I kept reading...this poem was great!!! The second and third stanzas were nothing short of breathtaking.
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This is so fantastic, with each stanza i could feel mself more drawn and captivated by your word, what a fantastic write. well done
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Nice write. Think any rhyming poet can relate to those times where you just can't find the word that both expresses your feelings, and rhymes. When you do work out a piece though, it's like creating a puzzle that also speaks to you, and that's something special. Nice write.
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i choose rhyme over flow everytime, but when both happen, it makes for a beautiful poem. very nice word choice and good point
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I have lists of Rhyming words on my PC. I also use a Thesaurus, which comes in handy. I was told that if you can enter countries, or a city, or a persons name, it can help. Good Luck, Cheers...
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There are times when making a poem rhymes is just a bothersome and even if I find words to go along, they usually sound broken and don't flow well.
Nice write and very true.
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Having spent the last few days banging my head against the desk trying to get the last couple of rhymes in my latest poem, I can identify with this strongly.
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