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Rain's Remnants

Ah, the freshness of the rain,
as if purifying the earth with its gift;
the aftermath of storm's fury
leaving blue skies, rainbows and growth.

Sitting on the veranda smelling that scent
feeling the coolness of the breeze;
hearing the birds chirping, the bees buzzing
while flowers drip drops of wetness to the ground.

Nourishing the soil, helping plants shoot up
reaching so high, getting greener;
puddles for kids to splash in, fill rubber boots
as I enjoy the remnants of the rain today.

Author notes

Grannyeri
Amaranthine Lover

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  • carole21
    October 8, 2008

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    nicely written . . images . . liked "the aftermath of storm's fury" and "reaching so high" . . congrats on the HM as well


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    October 8, 2008
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    Beautiful imagery here.


  • Ted E Bare gold member
    September 1, 2008

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    I'm a big kid as I still splash in puddles(lol). I totally agree with your author's notes. Beautiful entry. Thank you for taking the time to enter "Do You Truly Love The Rain?" contest.

    Ted E


  • quantumsurveyor
    August 31, 2008

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    A delightful relaxation in nature's rainy aftermath. Couple of thoughts, birds chirping, bees buzzing is perhaps a little vin ordinaire when set against the rest of your poem. It seems to me that the full stop (period) after "to the ground" destroys the sense of the following words which appear to need the first line of the second verse for completion....so: "Sitting on the veranda.......as I enjoy the remnants..." I liked this poem.


  • tomisb
    August 30, 2008

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    I can hear the last drippings of a rainy day in your words and feel the clearness in the air.
    Love, Tom B.


  • Olivias Violin
    August 28, 2008
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    Great job

    especially the second stanza


  • crimsondew
    August 28, 2008

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    Awww..lovely write..love the rain smell myself..
    All the best in the contest!

  • Bad Bill
    August 28, 2008
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    Nice one--your poem is as fresh as the rain you write about. A pleasure to read.

    Bill


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    August 28, 2008

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    Such a beautiful write you have
    penned here my friend. The rain
    is such a special part of our
    universe. Lovely work here and
    good luck to you with this one!




    Jeremy0826

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