Make sunrise early and the sunset wait;
make summer early and the winter late!
Allow the crops to sprout and thrive
and give me hope to man the drive.
Please let the raindrops fall at night
and keep the ground firm in daylight.
Make all my callouses a bit more tough
when times are hard and life gets rough.
Please, bless the plow that parts the furrow
and earth in which our hopes shall burrow.
Supply enough of sweat and blood
to drive on when bad luck should flood.
Dear Lord, I ask you bless the seeds
and spare them from the choke of weeds.
Help them arise from in the ground
and bear enough to go around.
But most of all...
Please keep my spirit in your palm
my will intact, my body strong,
my family close, my faith untaxed,
my heartbeats tight, my laughs relaxed!
Author notes
The farmer has always had a lot to discuss with God, starting with Adam after being sent from the garden of Eden... It's a timeless communication, no matter how it is versed 
Please tell me what you think
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My having been a farmer's wife, have you ever got the heart of the farmer in every line...Your rhyme and flow, the spirit of the write shows the dependence of the farmer on the elements and prayer for his own food plus the food of others to come into their bins.....Delightful excellent read!
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Excellent
I wonder why you have "a bit" in the line in the second verse: "Make all my callouses a bit more tough" where the meter is right without it? Otherwise, excellent poem.
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Bravo I love this.
A good griity prayer.
This humble gardener could do with a prayer to make the slugs go away!
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My official review of your poem in the contest. Because this is a 'final' contest, I am feel I should be as strict as I can be in looking over every aspect of the poetry presented. I have never claimed to be an expert in any of the categories, however I have been learning a great deal over the last few months. Not only did I want to challenge you [the poet] but myself as a judge.
Below I've made the ruling/score in regards to the points. If you disagree with any of my reasoning please 'reply' to the comment made – with “Challenge” and explain where you feel my assessment is wrong, if I agree with your argument I will change the score. I'm never to proud to admit when I'm wrong. If I feel I am still correct I will bring in a 2nd judge to make the final decision to a change. This final judge will be through my grammar group.
Your Scores:
Finalist -- 0/10 points - Welcome to the 'final' round of the option contest. It may be a little tougher of a challenge to overcome those who were finalist but, I'm sure it can be done. ~ Best of luck to you – now to your write.
Use of Prompt - 20/25 Points – Timeless – Though I've read and re-read your poem several times, I think I dug down deep to reach in and find the correlation to 'timeless' is the eternal/daily prayer of a simple soul.
Poetic Form – 20/20 points – This is regards to the actual structure of the poem. Your poem 4 lines stanza aabb. Simplistic and makes the flow of the read quite enjoyable!
Use of Grammar - 10/10 Points – I didn't find any errors, very nice!
Spelling - 10/10 points - Perfect!
Overall Presentation 20/25 points – The background and fonts are tad difficult to read with the background, however I do feel it gives it that 'Arizona' type of feel completely fitting with the poetry you've penned. There are many parts of the poem that I especially enjoyed how it was written. You did a terrific job!
Your total score is 80
I do appreciate your participation. It was a welcome pleasure to read and review your work. I think you did a terrific job!
Best of luck to you,
Florida Sunshine
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nice job
I grew up on a farm so this really did speak to me
honestly though even though it was hard I loved it and still wish I was on the farm.
best of luck
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An amazing poetic prayer. How important is this prayer for us, to bless the land to bring forth food for us. Wonderful work!! Flawless and powerful!!
Sam
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Very Impressive
The farmer's plea represents the quest for life - no matter how much it has changed with time. You have portrayed this quite well, with the best choice of words and flawless rhyme. It's almost near perfection as a work of art, especially towards the end. The author's note is special too, making clear what you try to say through this beautiful poem. The message is clear, but the meanings could evolve endlessly, depending on the readers' state of mind and outlook to life.
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