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Disguises

 

 

 

 

 

 

   I

 

 

 

I remember this poet

that used to spin me

in an endless gaze

turning yield signs

into spiral shells

of poetic vanity

 

 

I went back for

a recent rendering

and he was stuck

with old disguises

while hammering

the same tired whores

 

 

  II

 

 

 

You know the kind

where the river is dead

the sky is still

and our sun has turned

silver

He forgot to pay her

I suppose

 

 

Much like

his dried up stories

living on dust

and antique accolades

he lost the race

while quietly

licking himself

at stop signs

 

 

  III

 

 

 

Praise never cums

with epiphanies

just virgin headstones

dead before

turning the next page

that higher price

of humility

 

 

Deep mirrors

and marvelous flesh

was his language then

the last poem I read

he rhymed love

with above

maybe

he did find

a new whore

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Cannonsfire
    December 2, 2008

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    This is just about the best thing I've read all week, strong and rich with those flavors that make you go Damn! I wish I had written it. You blow my mind sometimes with the way you can see something and make it live C


  • onerios13
    December 1, 2008

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    Much like

    his dried up stories

    living on dust

    and antique accolades

    he lost the race

    while quietly

    licking himself

    at stop signs


    Brilliantly expressed, this entire piece reeked of bitter sensuality, the words like tiny cuts that made you wish for the sweet touch of death...or that it would never end. lol Frighteningly clever, emotionally exqusite, this is definitely a contender.


  • ecrivain01 gold member
    December 1, 2008
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    So once again ...

    we see that all our idols have feet of clay. C'est dommage.

    Great write.


  • Captain Redundant gold member
    December 1, 2008

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    " He's sooo vain, I bet he..."

    This is great from concept to whore.


    Good stuff.


  • Rowan gold member
    November 16, 2008
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    The ending was perfect. This one drew me in and didn't let go.


  • Cherokee
    September 11, 2008
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    There are so many little surprises in this. A treat for sure. If I was any good at commenting, I'd write the most phenominal thing right now. I really would. It would sizzle when touched. Would you settle for a hug? Don't answer... this is anonymous.


  • zochit2me gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    How unique to compare poetry to whoring yourself...lol
    Unless I got a whole different meaning than anyone else. This rocks the page from beginning to end and held me completely captivated.

    ♥Becky♥


  • Malabu
    September 3, 2008
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    i love this muddy

    i don't think i need say more...

    mal


  • marc creamore
    August 30, 2008

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    This penning invokes so many different responses within me . . . Somewhat haunting, words that cut close to the bone . . . Yet another perfectly scribed musing from your pen Richard . . .


  • sailor ptolema
    August 28, 2008

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    oh my god. This was so ...captivating. I was drawn deep into the words. I just loved this poem, so very much.

    Meg

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  • Auburn Sunrise silver member
    August 28, 2008

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    Exquisite writing. You are extremely talented - and it seems naturally so.

    I'm uncertain about this poem - it provokes mixed emotions and thoughts in me.

    At first, it seems a bit humorous... "hammering... whores", but it has a serious undercurrent and tone. One that is astonishing in its maturity and wisdom.

    I agree with TMD - it reminds me of how it feels when someone you put up on a pedestal crashes down suddenly and violently, in the worst of ways.

    At the same time, it offers a bit of hope at the end... maybe he did find something better and worth living for...

    Like I said, mixed thoughts and emotions. Makes me want to laugh, cry, smile and scream at the same time.

    This is real poetry - that's what poetry should do to you!

    Trulymadlydeeply referred me to your page, stating that she knew I would appreciate your work - and she was so right.


  • trulymadlydeeply
    August 28, 2008

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    This reads with such sadness. This also reads with the disillusionment of discovering those we have come to admire have fallen from grace. That they are just people too, with their own demons they wrestle with.
    Yet compassion is weaved between the lines.
    good luck in the contest.
    tmd


  • Nicolette gold member
    August 28, 2008
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    ~ Nicolette


  • poet2angels gold member
    August 28, 2008

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    Brilliant





    Lynda


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    August 27, 2008

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    Vanity has been the downfall of many. Sounds like he lost sight of the gift and could only see himself. Introspection on the other had causes the opposite of pride. It causes vulnerability...and that makes for the magical stuff. May we be ever cautious. Beautiful, challenging thoughts, my friend.


  • Night Hope gold member
    August 27, 2008

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    "Much like

    his dried up stories

    living on dust

    and antique accolades"

    ~ * ~

    "Deep mirrors

    and marvelous flesh

    was his language then"


    These are some of THE most marvelously descriptive phrasings I've ever laid my eyes on, dearest Scribe...& you know I used to be a liberryan & all.  lol   What a wonderfully bitter brew this is ~ what a whirling, wild ride of a poem, straight from the cliffs of your pen. Good luck in Darcy's contest, Sweetie.   lol.   As if.



  • notorious gold member
    August 27, 2008
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    Beautiful

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