Swaying beneath the midnight stars;
piano cords striking a felicitous melody
as our feet dance across the brittle keys
in my ear you whisper a solid & sweet ballad
as I feel the warmth of your breath against my neck
& your tender hands move slowly down my back...
I see the world more clearly now
as my heart melts almost instantly into your soul
my eyes are focused on no one other than you...
Almost a perfect stranger, twirling me around on a fragile surface
silencing the rest of the world
so we can hear nothing but the ocean waves crashing at shore.
Darling, I don't know who you are
but I only feel at ease when I'm with you.
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Author notes
Picture Credit: Dance_Me_to_the_end_of_Love_by_mmenathalie
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt by Angelflower.
600 points, ended August 30, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
feedback would be greatly appreciated :D
Comments
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I love silencing the rest of the world, and your heart at the end. Very romantic, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
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whisper
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Wow I really enjoyed the image created. So many people expect so much out of a "loving" night.
This creates an image in my head and makes me feel at ease. In my opinion, this would be an unforgettable moment. One that would last forever. -
This is beautiful. Any guy should be lucky to have you as his girlfriend.
And the pic is great
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Great!!
Awesome use of the picture as inspiration my love!
-Swaying beneath the midnight stars;
piano cords striking a felicitous melody
as our feet dance across the brittle keys-
Your use of metaphors is seriously breath-taking every time. You just have a compelling way of twisting words into something that means so much more.
Totally different from your other poems, and I loved it, of course :]
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This is absolutely beautiful.
My heart stopped as soon as I started reading!
It was romantic and quite dashing..
I loved it :]
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Lovely imagery, so romantic! I can feel such passion in this, extremely well done!
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a wonderful poem full of some brilliant imagery and emotion from the first line to the last good luck in the contest
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'as I feel the warmth of your breath against my neck
& your tender hands move slowly down my back...
I see the world more clearly now'
those lines have me sitting here just like...wows.
they're so beautiful. honestly, i love this, and it goes really really well with the picture =D
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thank you dahlinggg :]]]
i appreciate yer input
makes my day !
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Oh how beautiful!! you did such a wonderful job.. It flowed so well.. made me smile for some reason..lol.. I like that.. thank you very much for sharing this.. best of luck in the contest..
Angel
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Truely a wonderful heart warming and yurning piece. Very impressive. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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Thank youuu for thee nice comment ! :]] ♥
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T_T so beautiful... why must you be good at everything...
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Awww, thanks I'm not that good haha but your comments make my day :]]]
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I'm going to go read your poems now
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