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Cloudy sky
the palms
the sea
overwhelm
one
small
mankind

A contest entry

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  • poetryality silver member
    September 20, 2008

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    I took a look at the picture you chose, and this poem is very vivid in capturing the scenery. I almost felt as if I were at the brink of a great storm. Excellent!

    Congrats on earning the Emerald Cup!


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


    • herrlurch
      September 22, 2008
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      Thank you for your comment. I feel honoured indeed.


  • Desire gold member
    September 1, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: [pic B]
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ while taking in Your words: one small mankind- Now this is quite interesting- for when I was reading these words, I kept seeing reference to Survivor- also the Tom Hanks movie- Castaway- also after reading- I'm shown images of like an ant in an antfarm- how when around many- one can appear insignificant but each ant has a significant duty- also how the environment plays a role in perception- the backdrop can help or hinder However this to be interpreted
    Whether metaphor or symbolism
    Hopefully the above comment makes some sense~
    Powerful take on the prompt ~
    Excellent images & message You have brought forth

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


    • herrlurch
      September 4, 2008
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      many thanks for your kind words (they're welcome anytime)

      I've tried to capture the impossibility of describing the picture (and not the picture itself). Since nature is to be found everywhere, You cannot draw a frame around it. Yet there are these smallest parts (you speak of ants) making sense for themselves. And phenomena (for me they're living creatures, in a way) like trees, clouds or the ocean are beyond description. And all of that in ten words? I guess it was this frame-within-a frame-idea (small parts expressing great things) which I found fascinating in the contest. And you need alot of words to describe this, as you can see BTW, I'm beginning to focus on the shorter poems now - they can express so much. Stay tuned...
      Flattered by every of your words: Goetz