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Unopened ( HM )

Lost mirrors reflecting glare

cold branches weeping such sorrow

tainted achromatic skies ever looming

shadows cast fallen hopes

 

Dreams never reached

unable to touch

feel

 

 

Distance miles once searched for

fade in paths of unopened doors

 

 

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Option No 4
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  • princessleejwctlvr2
    September 24, 2008
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    I LOVE IT!!!


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    August 29, 2008

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    Profound, brilliant and such a sad emotional piece. for me the parts that reached deep inside of me were the last 5 lines. just reached up and slapped me... it's a place that I've been before, not a happy place either..

    good luck in the contest

    kat


  • daviscth silver member
    August 28, 2008

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    This is a wonderful piece of poetry sis and the last two lines blew me away. Good luck in the contest.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    August 28, 2008

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    'tainted achromatic skies' beautiful subtle dark imagery hunni. A gorgeous write, showing such longing and sorrow. Best of luck in the contest


  • storiesuntold gold member
    August 27, 2008

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    Oh this is so sad honey

    You have such a flare of writting that brings out tears in my eyes and also to show what it would have been like if those door we so searced for had behind them

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