Careen.
Storm clouds
drift
hazed within
intertwined
lament of life.
Author notes
Image Credit: "Nature" found at Photobucket
A contest entry
- - Speak to Me in 10 Words XI - by Desire.
700 points, ended September 1, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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beautifully done for only being ten words. Thanks for sharing and congrats on the bronze.
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ckwriter69
Thank you so much.
~Pamela 
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Gear Shift
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ while taking in Your words: hazed within- I am shown a reference to balancing the challenges of Life- Kept seeing words: balancing act- also seeing a clown juggling balls- for some reason it is like juggling- home duties- family- work (whether professional-paid or volunteer) and self- also after reading- I keep getting reference to an ache- soreness-reference to having to deal with that and I keep getting phrase: reap rewards- not in a selfish way I am being shown but not be afraid to accept the benefits Life has to offer However this to be interpreted
Whether metaphor or symbolism
Hopefully the above comment makes some sense~
Powerful take on the prompt ~
Excellent images & message You have brought forth
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Desire
Thank you for this wonderful review. I am so pleased you enjoyed this one I am truly grateful for the honor of bronze in your contest.
Thank you.
~Pamela
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Oooo I love the picture and your words that goes with it. Its as if you have given the sky feelings, a sad yet strong one..excellent! Good luck in the contest.take care.
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i like this poem! very nicely done! =D
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I was a little puzzled by your use of "careen" (which means to beach a boat in order to caulk or clean the hull)... but perhaps you were applying the minor use of the word, as in "to heel over". In any case, the poem is very atmospheric.
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That is quite a dark foreboding picture and you have captured the moment in your carefully selected words Pam. I especially think "careen" is a well chosen word to set the stage here. Good job.
Paul
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Makes me think sad things.
Great poetry.
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