Acid tears trickle down my face,
Caressing my blush stained cheeks;
As the silver blade brushes against my porcelain skin,
Waiting to unleash its deadly kiss.
Shivers run up and down my body,
As sadness envolpes me,
Swolling me in one piece.
I'm frozen in place,
All too knowledgable as to whats about to come;
Guess my internal strength is deteriorating.
I brace myself,
As the blade sinks its razor sharp lips into my flesh,
Warm crimson defeat spills from my veins.
For a brief moment, relief washes over my conscious state,
Only too soon to be struck with remorseful regret,
It had only been a matter of time before I gave into my greatest demise.
Author notes
When I first started writing this, I was trying to write about an issue that I hadnt written about in awhile and I wanted to be see if I could possibly write something, without feeling that emotion. This piece wasnt intended to be about me but in the end uncounsciously I ended up writing this about myself.
Im a recovering/ex-cutter, but during the times when I was trying to learn new couping techniques, occasionally I would give and let my emotions take me. Afterwards however, I always felt as though I was weak and that I would never be able stop and I was remorseful for what I'd done. And thats what I was trying to convey in this.
option 1
ap name: dyingblack rose
A contest entry
- Just Let Me Fade Away.... (Options) by Dante Rayvenhart.
500 points, ended August 27, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anorexia, Bullimic, Self harm? State your feelings! by Lsh-x.
475 points, ended October 2, 2008, 29 entries
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WONDERFUL WRITE!!
This was written so well
Only one problem..
You can't hear me clap:~)
Love peace
campanaro
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thank you
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couping
i am recovering cutter also and your ability to vent about this is such an artist and great poem well continuing to be sober of it kudos
this poem was amazing
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thank you =)
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wow, your words are amazing, and the emotion touches me. great job on this, and good luck in your contest.
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Wow, what a great poem, I'm lost for words.
Breathtaking, sums it up.
Thanks for entering good luck in the conest
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ahh i just had to read it again.
the likness to this situation compare to mine is immense. again GREAT poem
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wow. yet again your poem drips talent.
wow. i love it. excellence just seems to come so naturally to you in writing it just makes me jealous.
this is great. once again, breathtaking write. -
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thank you =)
my talent though is more forced then anything, it hard for me to write even 14 lines where as you can spit out 100 lines like nothing. now thats natural excellence!
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your imagery is so beautiful =]
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thank you =)
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This is excellent. Love it. Thanks for entering
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Wow...I really felt this poem and the deep sadness that hangs over it...It's like, I could feel the pain...Maybe 'cause I have a similar experience...Very emotional and love the language! Great Job!!
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thank you so much for commenting. I too really appericate it
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