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Melting Beneath the Sun

I want to be beautiful.

Flipping through photographs
I look at myself, three years ago.

A quick glance in the mirror
I feel the determination.

Flipping through photographs
I look at myself, three years ago.

I want to be beautiful.

Scared souls point fingers at the media
But don’t think to point a finger at each other.

I derive mental pleasure
Airiness.

I give myself praise
For the first baby-step
The hardest phase.

I derive physical pleasure
Emptiness.

Let me surpass my dreams
Let me feel myself melting beneath the sun.

I want to be beautiful.

Flipping through photographs
I look at myself, today.

A quick glance in the mirror
I’m well on the way.

Flipping through photographs
I look at myself, today.

I want to be beautiful.

Author notes

I know it's sort of chopping in the middle, it's not what I intended, but that's how it's going to be.    

This is a personal poem - but I also wrote it (I now realize) in a form, which disguises the true topic behind.  It's not exactly being beautiful, that's a portion, but it's not the big picture.  It's a diesease.
Written January 17th, 2004

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  • Lamp
    November 16, 2004
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    brilliant

    beautiful poem

  • shatteredtrinket
    April 20, 2004
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    This is a wonderful poem, Noelani... "Let me surpass my dreams / Let me feel myself melting beneath the sun". This is a wonderful expression of the waves and rollercoasters life takes us on. Our experiences mark us, but our responses to these experiences are what mold us.
    -Heather

  • NoLuvNoChois
    January 17, 2004
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    i know exactly what you mean... i too long for the feeling of being beautiful i hope your dream come true.