Floating safely above,
One sees what is forgotten.
Dirty claws ripping savagely;
Innocent flesh torn.
Inside little ones scream -
Pain they have felt before.
Wide-eyed they stare,
Frightened of what is to come.
The beast’s breath decayed and hot.
His movements rough and callous.
Like a ragdoll lying motionless;
Her blood the only sign of life.
Humiliating words impale her soul.
Wishing death quickly upon herself;
Knowing she is shattered and impure.
The beast finishes with a snarl.
Mirrors reflect innocence lost;
A shell of a body filled with lost souls.
Not knowing where to turn -
Curled into a fetal position, rocking steadily.
Author notes
pic: http://jevousenprie.deviantart.com/art/Fetal-29421052
1. cutting/rape;
Option 4
write whatever you feel from
what you're feeling
let it all out.
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Great piece, love the flow and how well it was put together. I am impressed with the poem, as it being derived from a picture prompt. Good luck in the contest. Take care and have a great day.
Sandi -
wow, i loved this. what was really sad and filled with tons of emotion. you are a great writer. keep on writing and good luck in the contest!
thanks for entering ! (:
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Wow! This was dark. I have never read anything like this one before. It was good. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you for entering and best of luck too you in the contest.
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A person who rapes is a beast indeed.
A pure monster.
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This is a very beautiful poem. You packed a lot into a little.
Thank-you very much for entering this piece into my contest.
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wow very beautiful but sad. The length's good too. Thanks for entering
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its an amazing piece,l
loved it good luck
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Quite lovely and sad. Beautiful.
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Great job!! I like the way you write...especially the line:
Mirrors reflect innocence lost;
A shell of a body filled with lost souls.
Keep writing ya! Thanks for entering my contest and good luck
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amazing
this poem is good
it is not long and short it is perfect....
i will add you to finalist
thanks for the entry
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"the power of darkness"
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if dark could have a shadow this would be it like the dark of dark. amazing visuals and deep feelings of despair. i think i can guess what the subject of this is and what the beast is. i had a beast in my life too. just an amazing piece here
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this is sad and heartbreaking gl
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i like this. Exactly what is this about. I have an idea, but i don't want to guess and it be wrong.
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"The beast’s breath decayed and hot.
His movements rough and callous.
Like a ragdoll lying motionless;"
Definitely dark and raw and full of intensity.
Very well-written as well; I'm impressed.
Thanks for entering.
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wow this might be dark, but it's really powerful, i have never felt that kind of pain, but i think words such as these could help people heal after such terrible ordeals, best of luck in the contest
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WOW!
excellent poem...I could feel the pain...so sad ..i could feel it so well and you did so well on explaining vivid pain..good luck in the contest
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yes this does read as a very personal write. You really wrote an excellent write here. Flows well and has a ton of imagery. thanks for sharing this writh us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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amazing
this is an excellent write with strong graphic imagry, that makes the reader feel the vulnerability of the child within beautiful but heartwrenchingly sad
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This is something I can closley relate to and screams of pain and sadness. You wrote this strongly and beautifully standing up against these nightmares to confront them. Lovely write dear this is breath taking
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This can be taken a few different ways. I found the write to be interesting ~ and the imagery is well done. I can see exactly what your thinking.
Thanks for entering the contest ~ it was a pleasure to read your work
Florida Sunshine
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Excellent take on the prompt and your words breathe life into it.
Well Done & best of luck in the contest!
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